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MEZmerise 12-31-03 08:17 AM

school sucks
 
all i do is cause trouble at school
what am i gonna do when the teachers take me as a fool
dammit whole class thinks i'm cool
now this teachers taking away my respect and my drools
how am i gonna write my raps without any skills
homies and playas think i take drugs and pills
no time for those G's i have to climb the rap hill

school work all day no hang outs
study hard withut any doubts
i'm a human being i have ups and downs
sometimes the principal take me as a clown
cuz i'm fucken brown

chorus:is like a dream walking around with books in my hands
trying to figure out who's gonna help me out and who i'm gonna depend around
all i see and hear is knowledge its blurring in my fucken ears it's surrounded
school sucks i wish i was fucken grounded

students everywhere talking and walking
you see this faces everyday it feels like stalking
friends pushing eachother and mocking
teachers teaching without any stoppings
i'm sick and tired of it i need some smoking
i aint a drug addict so i was just joking

subjects changing every period
sometimes in the school grounds i see some syringes
they keep running by dont they know that its dangerous?

chorus2x


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Dev 12-31-03 08:29 AM

bit of a played topic...most feel that way when going thru school.... handled it ok...seen better...mainly id say improve the scheme...use some multis n word play....it will help the feel of the drop and the flow....but ok i suppose...pz....
......return the favour.......

~Yo What Up~ 12-31-03 10:36 AM

never rap about school again..........topic is wack as hell.........but uhh, the structure was pretty simple............rhyme scheme was ok..........vocab was basic..........overall this was a pretty basic drop........keep postin and elevatin homie.........

Penskills 12-31-03 10:55 AM

..I'm not feeling this piece at all..the whole flow was very weak..your vocab was below average...your wordplay was 3rd grade level...other than that..^^

Menik 12-31-03 02:20 PM

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.

...Àû†øpšÿ... 12-31-03 02:37 PM

Lol Decent And Kina Played But True....

repin 12-31-03 02:57 PM

wut u sed was tru bout school n shit........but i think its a weak topic.......try spittin bout sumthin else.......the vocab was weak.......but jus keep droppin......GOOD LUCK! ~1~

kaveh 01-01-04 03:19 AM

all that was true.could of put more punches tho.but it was good i liked it.

Damani-DaGrinch 01-01-04 08:18 AM

not bad........u gon hear a lot of peeps tellin u 2 make it mo complex ...but hey, u gotta crawl b4 u can walk
keep elevatin
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Eki 01-01-04 08:21 AM

it wasnt great . But it wasnt to bad. Just very simple, and not deep enough. Keep doing your shit and youll get there

Efusive 01-01-04 08:53 AM

Not really feeling this peice at all.. try a new topic.. nobody realy wants to read about school sucks.. sorry

Efusive 01-01-04 08:53 AM

ohh and you need to add 3 links to 3 previous battles you have read other wise this thread will get closed

Peace

Vitalz 01-01-04 05:55 PM

ya everyboddy hates school u need to elevate more ur flow wasnt very good eitha


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102814 drop an honest vote on this

Tsar Casm 01-01-04 09:33 PM

school sucks-and so does this drop

Ambitious 01-01-04 10:51 PM

a little bit of a played concept but you did it nicely.....good stroy telling....good choice of words nice vocab....a little basic but your metas and enjoyment made it nice.....struct was ok....nice job
keep droppin


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