tru storee:...Lil' G Mexikana
 

"LiL' G Mexikana"

poor little gurl, I see colors in her eyez
Just another latina that was born to die,
With a rag hangin down her pocket
d*amn u should have seen it the way i saw it
Livin life to tha fullest, in that kaliz life style
At least she is makin her vida worth while
out there bangin cuz she thinks its cool
Gettin bad grades, and skippin school
This poor lttle gurl only fifteen years old
Just a misfit in her familia, someone no one
wanted to hold
So she chose the gang as a first resort
Out there on the streets, fightin in the courts
But how does her mom feel, yo i bet u she feels
fucked Always tryin and tryin, get no where with
no luck She loves her mom and her mom
cares for her But shes got a job to do, this latina
aint got no fear
She gotta be down with the homies, you know its
do or die
So when somethin goes down, shes gotta be
ready to ride
She wants to get out but its too late
This is her life now i gues its her fate
She didnt chose this vida, this vida chose her
'Sorry Mom, i love you' because that is her mother
'so if i dies before i wake, bless the best'
And in peace let me rest
Take care of mi familia, live life to tha fullest and be strong
This vida will be better now that im gone
But you know, I think i know this little gurl feeled
with hate in her world
yup sure do, d*amn why does this have to be? cuz
when i take a closer look this gurl was me

Tru story..................I know it needs a lil work so hit me up wit feedbak an ill do tha sayme~alratoz~

the detail you gave in this piece i enjoyed. you seem to describe things in a different way, keeps me interested. it was a personal piece, so the emotion was of course shown well. i liked the twist in the end, but i could feel it already coming. one thing, try not to make the rhyme scheme seem too forced.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

thanx 4 takin tha tyme to really respond this piece took me alot of tyme cuz as u kan tell its heartfealt an filled wit emotions well thanx again much luz~alratoz~

Oh my this was the best. it was so heartfelt. It's like you know that little girl personally. The elevation process has begun.... Keep it up!

^^^lmao tha reason its filled wit emotion and heartfealt was kus im talkin bout me thas y i kno her so personally lol but ne way thanx 4 tha feedbak~alrato~

Ive seen people write about this topic, but it was never about themselves, so it was distant. This way, I feel i really got to understand it alot better. I think you should expand this, this could go along way by adding details.

i liked this piece...it had a nice image...but it was kind of distant...you still have alot of skill...you could write a better poem...STAY UP