My New Years
 

Quick escapade let the spade of aces set up the story quick~
love gone wrong dont worry this isnt a gory flick~
mortal perfection, my wife inception of love i grieve~
this woman of a creamy caramel complection my daughter she concieved~
So thats how far our love goes, but i sin partly~
because of alcohol and hip hop i cheat at a dim party~
I see a fully curved girl of the same complexion, eyes sparkin a question~
perplexed i ask her for a dance which leads to lustful nude affection~
i cant excuse fuckin shorty her eyes had me caught, wifey hit a rare rap~
talkin bout bustin guns cause of my lustful deeds im caught in a bear trap~
a clock would bring us back together, a month and we smiled my crew feared~
i would leave the block alone for good the hood need not worry its new years~
my party shuffle girl is fuckin preggo, that was october ma keep it on wraps~
my girl found out and like candles she not tryna keep the heat on wax~
she kicked me out, death threats followed me i shut down~
but that passed with the philly smoke i roamed uptown~
my vikings celebrated havin me back the time was a blast~
i found a girl who could move her body liike a snake and i got in that ass~
she had a mini dress and a tube top, i hid my ring and whispered in her ear~
grindin till the early part of Oh Four my dick was fillin wit fear~
shorty reached down and grabbed my shit, smiled at a nigga and we left my team~
hit my car twisted her out and left the windows wet with steam~
havent seen my girl since our fight and now its hate in my core~
regrets hit hard, cant wait to see wut a new year has in store~

1luv.

umm....elevation is key, 1luv.

Damn dude, this was one of the best 'all around' peices I've read in quite a while. On a technical level there aint nothing much at all wrong with it whatsoever. I think this peice would make a great rap song too, maybe something along the lines of DMX's Trina Moe or something.

As for the content, that's some heavy shit. Y'know the number one reason for women to cheat on their significant other is to get revenge on them, but for men they cheat just for the sex? I dunno why I said that, but I just thought I'd throw that in there.

Is this stuff happening in real life? I mean, cheating is a seriously bad thing, and I can't condone it. Even if it happened to me. But it is a forgivable sin. To an extent.

I hope this year is better for you though.

~Islam~

^thanks for the feedback man, and yeah this is going down in real life, elevation is key, 1luv.

thanks again Necro, elevation is key, 1luv.