Rap as a Life
 

Replied: deeEyeDoubleZWhy, N-Demik, rule

As I sit and demand my pen to write scriptures
I look on the other hand, raps are all fixtures
Like lookin @ artist pictures - all have different meanings.
Religions with different believings, its deceving
Rap as a God to some, and Satanic to others
Brothers, and whites.. come together for one
From a notepad, to a mic, to a net-cee
And a Emcee... one family, dissing yet rapping
The pen writes, and the mouth moves
The voice decives, and the image & meaning leaves
Have's the fan thinking & blinking, yet wondering.
There ambition, & antuition in each verse keeps ur pondering
Intuition from the smartest rapper, to a no vocab thug
Writing for the same reason, rap love..
Making demo's and going platinum, sellin bootlegged
Taking drugs, and flowing street anthems
O.Din and goin to jail, yet never suceeding to fail
Fleein yet returing stronger then ever
Achy, makin you angry, writers block blatnly.
From a 50 cent pen & an old notebook
Simply bent off rap wit a bent hopeful dream
Infinitly from the same destination'
Trying to make it to the same place, the industry
Wether you make it or not, if you try -
Thats winnin to me..

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it was okay. i wasn't really feeling it. i thought the flow was off. 5/10

heh the flow in the shape of multis..

Yeah this was alright i thought...structure in this was alright.....flow was ok, it got off at some points though through out the piece....your vocab in this was good i thought....you had some good multies....but overall this was alright...keep at it.

"Intuition from the smartest rapper, to a no vocab thug
Writing for the same reason, rap love.. "

Wouldn't be too hard to make that into a hook if you messed with it a bit.

I like the idea of this freestyle and overall I think it was well done. You could probably expand on the whole idea of comparing different rap style with religion... in fact, I might steal that from you :)

Good Job, It Had A Good Rhyme Scheme, Nice Metas & Multies. The Imargery Was There. Good Read. Keep It Up.

Good Job, It Had A Good Rhyme Scheme, Nice Metas & Multies. The Imargery Was There. Good Read. Keep It Up.

^Exactly

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