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i recorded this verse............


a girl from the rock crowd became a drop-out...
adapted to the popular preps and wont stop now
we go way back, history traced to seventh grade.
aged...settin dates with guys that bring her close to heavens gate
she was never fake, but anti-social timid in speak
herself, and didnt care about her rep as a geek
but she crew weak, a victim of social pressures
total measures done to change equal that of global efforts
stayed above the waist but soon tested her belt limits
her health dimished when she began to ahte her self image
she felt critics were right and didnt put up a fight
kept her mouth closed and also stopped takin bites
she knew her insecurities were being exposed
so to counter the effect she remained unclothed
the gun holds steady with every single thrust
nuts bust without a fuss but it wasnt for lust
the kept comin literally, one after another..
if it werent for the docotrs she'd be two times a mother
my steps studder, i see but afraid to go further..
contemplating wut i have to say it jsut might hurt her.
but i ask wuts the count? can i have a hint?
the amount could make a porn-star seem abstinent
what happened? you used to have a lot of friends
your mixed up along wit your alcohol and collatapins.
stop the binges please, you dont know wut is bringin
your off the hinges ever since you gone and start swingin
switchin partneres as often as a dosie-do
its a hard turn..........but you chose the road
and i've had enough i dont give a god damn
dont care, i'll jsut pretend to be the friend that i am
we all have guts and sooner or later we spill it...
if your life is empty you dont need a dick to fill it

dats pretty dope dog

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all i gotta say is......NICE DROP.....truely,i was really feelin u on this one ....... keep it up ~1~

im a white boy but i can sure fight boy

that was a good piece billy lots of creativty and imagry i enjoyed reading it.. keep up the good work..

Peace

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peace

lol, yo, i like this drop dog, you got some killa styles and you hot. i like it.

aged...settin dates with guys that bring her close to heavens gate

stop the binges please, you dont know wut is bringin
your off the hinges ever since you gone and start swingin

we all have guts and sooner or later we spill it...
if your life is empty you dont need a dick to fill it

this was very nice^^^^they were my favourite lines of this, the only thing i think it lacked was emotion, it did have some but needed more for this type of subject...but i mean as it is now...its a great piece

Yo this was some good shit brotha. Good flow. Some good meta's. The only thing I'd work on is some better multi's... but ill shit playa keep it up.