Thug vs Telekinetic
 

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jus vote when its done

:banghead: :laugh2:

Ok man im here you can start when ever
An whats the deal with the 100 characters or more shit
Im just tryin to check in here an have to type all of this
Just to get it to post lol

Well Goodluck

check check yo yo here i go,

yo, everybody watch while i rip this bitch like toilet paper//
only sex u get is payin a prostitute to let you rape her//
after this battle you still gonna be spittin your bars//
coz i'm gonna make you smoke this weapon like a cigare//
he fuck the local priest, so we hear his name, an no he rings bells//
he stayin in a sea front hotel, so he can tell niggaz, he got shells//
this wack fucker reads my verse and wants to be like me//
so he snaps up a pic of ME to put as HIS passport I.D//
fuck boy, i think im winning, coz my verse hit like a bar of steel//
you can ask me for a rematch, but u'll still be spinnin like the g-unit wheel//

yo what u know? reply soon. peace

Alot of shits gona be said so I think I should clear it
If raps you life your dead an after this your a spirit
Set back for just minute and watch me put on a clinic
From a lyrical menace you must salute the lieutenant
Gimmy your attenit-on son I drop bombs from A to Z
Now you met the boss an by now you lost from A to B
See, when rhymin im the doc well you can call me D.O.C.
You owe me forty bucks for the lesson check or C.O.D.?
Its immanent you lose I bruise infernal fowl immigrants
On this mic Im droppin shit like internal bowel stimulants

Aight let the voting comence

Street*thug
I heard that shit already, either you're biting or you re-typing what you already wrote
what's the deal on that, that's not the business, don't try to tell me AI have'nt heard that b4 on here cuz I'll go find it.........
telekinetic won hands down just for that.

yea i did it before but the guy didnt drop so i wasnt gonna waste a verse on some wack fucker, well if he duz get the votes i will do another battle wit him, wit a new verse

Ok its over. We now need votes on who won. Come on people dont sleep on us over here drop some info on the verses please

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yo, everybody watch while i rip this bitch like toilet paper//
only sex u get is payin a prostitute to let you rape her//
Quoted By Steertthug one of the tightest beginning I have ever heard on this piece. So that is why I go with Thug

My vote would go to thug

Any voters out there please im lookin for a start of a record here come on please vote.............................................. ............
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What the hell not one damn vote. All that bullshit for nothin
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ayo, this battle could be a lil' better, wit' punches & flow, but it was umm, aight, overall.

Net- uhh, I mean "Street" Thug:
yo, everybody watch while i rip this bitch like toilet paper//
only sex u get is payin a prostitute to let you rape her//
^aight opener: 5/10

after this battle you still gonna be spittin your bars//
coz i'm gonna make you smoke this weapon like a cigare//
^which weapon was that, thug?: 4/10

he fuck the local priest, so we hear his name, an no he rings bells//
he stayin in a sea front hotel, so he can tell niggaz, he got shells//
^decent punch: 6/10

this wack fucker reads my verse and wants to be like me//
so he snaps up a pic of ME to put as HIS passport I.D//
^umm, ok, y'all twinz? 4/10

fuck boy, i think im winning, coz my verse hit like a bar of steel//
you can ask me for a rematch, but u'll still be spinnin like the g-unit wheel//
^and you're a G-unit soldier, right? hmm...aight close: 5/10

Telekinetic:

Alot of shits gona be said so I think I should clear it
If raps you life your dead an after this your a spirit
^ehh, this opener didn't work for me: 4/10

Set back for just minute and watch me put on a clinic
From a lyrical menace you must salute the lieutenant
^"Put on a clinic?" -ok: 4/10

Gimmy your attenit-on son I drop bombs from A to Z
Now you met the boss an by now you lost from A to B
^this bar was just filler: 4/10

See, when rhymin im the doc well you can call me D.O.C.
You owe me forty bucks for the lesson check or C.O.D.?
^too much like oldschool Dre, man: 3/10

Its immanent you lose I bruise infernal fowl immigrants
On this mic Im droppin shit like internal bowel stimulants
^this was your only punch, the rest was just dissin'. Punches win battlez:4/10

Breakdown:
Open: Street
Close: Street
Personals: None
Flow: Tele
Metas: Street
Multis: None
Creativity: ehh

Vote: Street

Keep elevatin, and put more metaphors and punches/snaps in ya verse -shit to grab attention and make a mu' fucka say "damn!"

Ok I got a question exactly what are multis if there were none

Is this not one?
"Its immanent you lose I bruise (infernal fowl immigrants)
On this mic Im droppin shit like (internal bowel stimulants)
An I thought (A to Z) an (A to B) were

Is (clear it) and (Spirit) wordplay?

But anyway thanks for the vote