Story Jawn/ quick drop
 

replied to:
True-Souldja
Razer
Big E Z

New sht.... Kinda jumps around/// Quick drop
./// will expand and redo later

The pressure of a knife touches my skin/
but the measure of my life is not where it ends/
but begins.. gotta take u way back/
club hoppin and bub popin was the main thing/
used to be just the chain bling and the mac ring/
till i met this one jawn, just my main squeeze/
I would tell the bitch to get down and she blew like the breeze/
I met her sis one cold night/
kinda quiet but was still tight/
startin creepin and became serious/
main jawn caught me but i said "the drugs makin u delirious"/
One night cops ran through/
cause i cop the keys my shots rang 2/
Hopped in the drop and speed for her crib/
airport.. out of the country we slid/
Now we beach breezin/
no heat squeezin/
calmed down plus she cook up a meal/
had the hook up forreal/
Now my baby girl bout to drop my baby girl/
Shit was good/
Till the hood came after me/
shot up the place/
should'a known i can never leave the hood after me/
Missed me but caught her nice/
100 degree weather... heart turned cold ass ice/
now its over/ no reason to live/
no more life... nothing to give

firstly some of it doesn't rhyme...so obviously knocks the flow...also some lines need work on the syllables... but ya said it was going to be reworked...so i would add more complexity to it...upp the scheme....n wordplay...pZ....
return the favour....

thnx yea i did this real real quick..

Man your feedbacks are shit...leave better feedback and PM me the links and i will re-open this....but till then this is closed.