Corrupted Visions: Farewell
 

Farewell my friend, I hope to see you on the other side…
My own brother dies as I have to listen to my mother cry…
As tears roll down my cheek all I can do is frown no speech…
Because I was out of reach now you’re gone Im about to weep…
And I just feel its my fault that you are not here no more…
I should have been there for you and you these tears go for…
Nothing will change the way I feel and everyday I will…
Pray to god that you are just ok up there and may I still…
See your smiling face, dialing fate to see when I can visit…
I would take your life and fix it but this isn’t real is it?…

Farewell my good friend…
In my thoughts you shall spend…
Farewell my good friend…
All my love is what I send…
Farewell…my good friend…

Not a day passes by when I don’t remember that day…
I wanna take the truth and make it false but the facts stay…
A lot was on my mind when I closed the lid shut though…
Like there was so much I wanted to say to you….but no…
My eyes got all teary cause I knew you wouldn’t hear me…
But I said them anyway hoping you would listen clearly…
You were a big impact in my life, I hope I win this strife…
Cause its hard knowing that your gonna begin new life…
And I wont be there for a long time, all I can do is grieve…
It honestly just was the wrong time…for you to leave…

Farewell my good friend…
In my thoughts you shall spend…
Farewell my good friend…
All my love is what I send…
Farewell…my good friend…

Now that I accept the facts for what they are I must say…
I miss you man don’t try to leave I’ll be there soon just stay…
You will never be forgotten you’ll always be in my heart…
And I try hard to full fill my part but all I can do is cry hard…
But im trying to remember all the good times we had together…
And promise me that you’ll be waiting on me…you better…
You’re the person I wanna see when I break through the gate…
Cause there is things I wanna say to you straight to your face…
But till then I’m here thinking of you, you’ll never die man…
Cause in my thoughts…me and you…forever we stand…

Farewell my good friend…
In my thoughts you shall spend…
Farewell my good friend…
All my love is what I send…
Farewell…my good friend…

/\fucking wack











jk

good drop imagery vocab rhyme scheme

yup

Awesome Work...Your the man!.............................................. .................................................. .

Im sorry but im going to have to close this if you do not put up your 3 links. :)

^lmao

:shocked: let me go get them...lol

liked this drop....got a good sense of feeling in it..and imagery...flow n shit was good aswell....and the content was nicely put together...all in all good work...pZ..laterz.

yea i agree wit Deva this was Good And Ya Had Nice Flow Like ya Normally Do and Ya structure is always Good and Nice Lengths In ya Lines.....Ya Vocab and Wordplay where also good Made the Imagery Nice I could understand....All And All this Was Nice Man it Worked Out Nice I Think ya topic was a Little Bit Played...PeacE...

Yea this was a nice read, ..it flowed very well..had some deep aspects, turning points,in it..vocab was on point, ..like to read this, .. = )

i felt this good flow and i saw it my mind, i disagree with uski that the idea is played. if death is played so is love ,hate and every thing else. i thought the chours could have had more s were it was going but the last line could had some thing. other then that very nice. better response?

this was dope....... you had a good chorus, and you stayed on topic...... your structure was pretty good and it had a really good flow to it......... keep droppn'....... pz

yo this was a good read i liked the imagery you got going through to the end.. good flow you kept everything constant.. but the best part was getting to the end.. i dont mean that as a diss i mean.. seeing your sweet ass sig.. damn..
anyways.. good piece keep dropping :)

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