"For what its worth"
 

for what its worth, i never cared
about it, like it changed the way
i doubt it, so its like my life is shit
i faked it, so now i quit
that its
im done
fuck it
fuck everyone
so you changed
so you say
everyday you act the same
but i can believe you
no i cant
its what you made me think
im the chosen
the one you looked to
for what its worth
i'll never forget you

it was a simple peice

i would say lengenth your lines, dont use such simple rymes, get more detail

but not to bad for 6 drops

Simplistic no doubt...but you could elavate..do what he said and work on some creative lines...like use some more depth detail and try and create a setting...but good read non the less for a start

Nice piece. Emotion was felt. I agree with making the lines longer and not so simplistic. You put your feelings into it, but you may want to explain them a little more. Just a thought, not hatin. Overall good job. I liked it.