War has no place in my world
 

If the only reason for war is for land and glory
How can those muthafuckers count for the stories
That come out the trenches about sufferin and pain
All cos of one murderin governments gain
And the way they look down the tv with their fake carin eyes
Everyone knows that there is no real feelin for our fightin guys
You can call it murder, treason, chosen death or homocide
But everyone hates the muthafucking polititians that stood there and lied
Directly to our face through the screen of a television
All gloating at their pointless victories over all the opposition
And this creation, that is being represented
Is for their nations ego that hopefuly been augmented
But infact their potential is being tainted
The inner countries pupil is becoming dilated
How can they understand the pain that is being subjected to people
They cant cos their dictator is like Ming, pure evil
Their policies become more and more frenzied and unbelievable
The other nations become more defiant and less fearful
But what does it take to stop people becoming tearful
We need cheerful, happy living communities
Not fighting aimed for the future of you and he and him and me
Who cares about politics and countries TERRORtry
I know for sure that one of those people isnt in my vacinity
And beleive me, i can fight for any cause going
But not killing or government overthrowin, fighting, scared or tip toeing
But the pain isnt always in war over sea in different places
Look at the nationals, directly in their faces
They know pain that no one has encountered or foundered
That pain that no one can control, level off or rounded
But the pain comes from hate or loss of a being
That aggrevation that comes from no time seeing
And war is a main catalyst for this anger and violence
People have to stand up, put their views forward and be defiant
Not be midgets in the way of the U.S giant
Stand up, cause an upheaval and peaceful riot
But make sure you stand up and be counted and not stand by and watch it
Take heed, go with great speed and get your people freed
Dont stand back, stop the conflict and take the lead
Help your needs, go forward and examine the obvious circumstances
Choose your options wisely, be pragmatic
Operactic, dont panic, courageous like the Titanic
Stick it in the conversation and look at the feedback
Peoples minds are stuck on a one track,no facts
Just opinions from there narrow minds
Still stuck in the past, Thatcher times
And lines and lines set by school teachers
Like in the 18 hundreds still with traditional functions
Still crazy and non diplomatic reasons
So go forth,be a warrior,jump up and fight humanities corner
But i warn ya, it isnt easy, im not in this state because it loved me
Im here cos it shrugged me...aside, still and bonafide
But i still fight for the rights of others
For my family, race, fellow sisters and brothers
So put something back for me and shout
Put yourself out and about
And do something useful, fight to stop the wars.

This was really good. Structure was a little off at the end, but I think the flow was good. Had some good wordplay. Good drop.

Yeah this was alright here......your structure could use work though...some of your lines were kinda stretched out, try keeping your lines around the same length so its structured well and so it helps the flow out in your pieces....the flow was ok, but could use some work i think....try adding some more multies though....but keep at it.