feedback please
 

Ive got an open mind 24/7//
You shouldnt battle anymore just give up//
Like your momma said its better safe than sorry//
I took her advice, I wore a condom when I fucked her//
I felt for her, she dont need another son like you//
When you came out the world was in shock//
The worlds ugliest baby, so tha doc slapped ya mom//
Go crawl back under ya stone before ya get stepped on//
Im gonna smoke you like I would canibus//
Just Get out of here, heres some coin go catch the bus//

people are sayin this sucked cos most of it didnt rhyme, does ya verse really have to rhyme?

To be honest....Yeah.
That verse was horrible, not hating, just stating the facts.
Go read some tutorials or summat.

Good Day

Yo, none of ya bars rhymed. Straight up playa, you need to go to the sub-forum and look at the tips.

Yo, this should be in Open Mic

LOL.

practice makes perfect.

nobody's perfect

so why practice?