12 bars quick shit
 

back up back up cus here comes danger/
call me the new member of wu tang cus im comming from the 36 chambers/
dawg u got something on me please/
i got ya gurl screaming ooouuuu like Alicia Keys/
when it comes to da mic im wit it/
but if you wanna fight drop drop ya shit homie and lets get it/
look im comming straight at you so get used to it/
niggaz be runnin they mouth but they dont do shit/
im da P.i.m.p of the century of course/
i'll run a train on ya gurl like a metro north/
if you want the title that i have then come on wit it/
my castastrophy csauses tragedeys you don treally want it/

thought it was ok... but didnt flow too good... i prefer it when the rhyme is carried further... but decent wordplay n scheme....pZ

Yeah this was alright.....your structure was alright for a quick key i guess...like deva said had some alright wordplay in this....Vocab was alright i thought....had some ok multies, could have been better with those...keep at it.

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it was aaaight, wasn't feeling it that much, you got good vocab-and a ok flow, keep elevating dogg. :thumbup:

aiiight but nowt special....ADVICE-:find a conept n stick with it
cos it seemed all over the place....it's 1 of those that'd sound better than when readin it......flow aiiight,vocab...bah....etc
6/10

Dey call me Unknown Skillz//
When I step up ta da mic I give da niggaz chillz//...................
And when Im done roastin you...there still blood on da grillz//
You need to taste da defeat like Skittlez//................................
To me ur rhymes are small like Edward and the Littlez//...........
The consequenses are horrid like payin da over due billz//.......
When Im done wit a battle....No problem B i still got da illz//...
Im an unstoppable force and corrosive//.........................
U just a big gas bubble dat get explosive//....................
Imma preclude you from dis battle//..............................
If I fall off da horse I just jump back on the saddle
DONE

i don't know...... it seemed kind of basic and I really didn't get the topic......... flow was off too, structure was okay........ i think you could do better.......... pz