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Mr.Christensen 01-08-04 01:58 AM

Bored... Dont take this seriously
 
Late at night, I'm bored sitting by the desk
Are my ideas all under arrest, am I the best
Whos left to ask, all the best just left
He said goodbye, and thanked me for his help
Felt his words from when I was whelp

Damnit im bored and i lost my chain of thought
It got caught in the spokes of my...thought

Damn I think im coming down with ADD the
way the lines done fit an idea ket alone a
plea for help from the brains active side
lest I gain a graps on my actions and decide
that a key'd rhyme is not worth the fast rolex
i use to pass the time, speaking of time ever seen a boflex
chuck norris looks 20 years younger... his hips sure to swirl
the commercial is worth a whirl just to see the uptown girl

do i have an obbsession with girl not my age, nah
then again, my screen saver is full of (insert rhymed named)
my witty attempts sure are lame, my aim list in ignored
but no matter now, i found a way to no be bored

Trapt Wit 01-08-04 02:00 AM

Actually realtively nice for just being bored....

BOOOO!!!!!

^
To Sureal leaving...

I remember him thinking my open mics were dope...
Now mine suck compared to his...


= )

Mr.Christensen 01-08-04 02:02 AM

wow by the spelling mistakes you can really tell i didnt even look at what i was saying...

look mom, my first freestyle

Ox 01-08-04 02:03 AM

Now this is a really good open mic, your structure was off a bit in the middle, but I feel the flow made up for that.. you had really good imagery, and we have all gone through how you feel at one time. So keep dropping, nice work.

Ox 01-08-04 02:09 AM

But after reading it again, your topic seemed to shift in the middle. But I guess your flow was what you were looking for if not then you dropped some shit. Next time, don't talk about Chuck Norris.

Trapt Wit 01-08-04 02:16 AM

I actually like the stream of conciousness approach

Born To Kill 01-08-04 11:21 AM

I liked this despite the spelling mistakes and lacadaisical approach.

I thought it was pretty tight when ya spit, "insert rhymed name"...

Very inventive.

Good shlocky verse.

Entertaining.

Peace

Mr.Christensen 01-08-04 04:45 PM

Well it goes to show you

I suck!

Gunman tha Great 01-09-04 09:59 AM

good i enjoyed it

Castro XL 01-09-04 08:34 PM

Huh............................................... .................................................. .................................................. ..............

Mr.Christensen 01-10-04 05:08 AM

and i mean this is the nicest way possible

i hope you die tomorrow

repin 01-10-04 06:20 AM

pretty good fo bein bored....structure was off a lil in tha middle but...not too bad....keep spittin...luck..... ~1~

Sureal 01-10-04 09:31 PM

Beautiful.

ALBuRnA 01-10-04 10:42 PM

im sayin it was suttin 4 bein bored but...i gotta see wut da kid can do wen u really on ya focus...1

Mr.Christensen 01-11-04 12:56 AM

Then do a search...


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