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Bored... Dont take this seriously
Late at night, I'm bored sitting by the desk
Are my ideas all under arrest, am I the best Whos left to ask, all the best just left He said goodbye, and thanked me for his help Felt his words from when I was whelp Damnit im bored and i lost my chain of thought It got caught in the spokes of my...thought Damn I think im coming down with ADD the way the lines done fit an idea ket alone a plea for help from the brains active side lest I gain a graps on my actions and decide that a key'd rhyme is not worth the fast rolex i use to pass the time, speaking of time ever seen a boflex chuck norris looks 20 years younger... his hips sure to swirl the commercial is worth a whirl just to see the uptown girl do i have an obbsession with girl not my age, nah then again, my screen saver is full of (insert rhymed named) my witty attempts sure are lame, my aim list in ignored but no matter now, i found a way to no be bored |
Actually realtively nice for just being bored....
BOOOO!!!!! ^ To Sureal leaving... I remember him thinking my open mics were dope... Now mine suck compared to his... = ) |
wow by the spelling mistakes you can really tell i didnt even look at what i was saying...
look mom, my first freestyle |
Now this is a really good open mic, your structure was off a bit in the middle, but I feel the flow made up for that.. you had really good imagery, and we have all gone through how you feel at one time. So keep dropping, nice work.
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But after reading it again, your topic seemed to shift in the middle. But I guess your flow was what you were looking for if not then you dropped some shit. Next time, don't talk about Chuck Norris.
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I actually like the stream of conciousness approach
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I liked this despite the spelling mistakes and lacadaisical approach.
I thought it was pretty tight when ya spit, "insert rhymed name"... Very inventive. Good shlocky verse. Entertaining. Peace |
Well it goes to show you
I suck! |
good i enjoyed it
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Huh............................................... .................................................. .................................................. ..............
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and i mean this is the nicest way possible
i hope you die tomorrow |
pretty good fo bein bored....structure was off a lil in tha middle but...not too bad....keep spittin...luck..... ~1~
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Beautiful.
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im sayin it was suttin 4 bein bored but...i gotta see wut da kid can do wen u really on ya focus...1
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Then do a search...
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