My Religion
 

Drug Addicts View of Being God

He's controllin his life, and everybody elses,
Some would say it's trife, and he's only bein selfish,
But he say so fuckin what, just shut-ya-mouth,
You bout ta get hurt and Ima say fuck-ya-health,
It's like a blind man with prescription-glasses,
Sent ta find my way while Im kickin-asses,
Discretely I get beat repeatedly and tossed-around,
I might be seen in the surrounding lost-n-found,
What will it take to make me shake-this-hell,
Turn out ta be a 34 year old dateless-male,
Why is he doing this I deserve-it-better,
My life gets 'fucked up' more thenna a pervert-letter,
This isnt a game, and I'm just tryin-to-play,
Lookin for fame, and end up dyin-today,
I sorta dont wanna live cause tortures-scary,
Knowin everyday u might end up in the mortuary,

Gods View

Dont be scared n dare to live and havva proper-wife,
I aint tryin ta front when people die n u get offered-life,
I'm the only man that can stand and stop your fate,
Read this shit and know it flows atta proper rate,
Operate on bodies that dont have a single hope,
I make ya happy, laughin outburst like water when the shingle broke,
I cant stop fate or change the way people die,
All I can say is happiness occured when my steeple rised,
See I aint a bad man I just happen ta have evil eyes,
And Im the one that allowed weed to be legalized,
This aint a game its a stratedgy, I provoke tragedy,
Helpin when I can even though I cant and people mad-at-me,
Call me evil if u want cause a saviour is what I had-ta-be,

I dunno just tryin out new topics let me know what ya think.

Pz.

thought it didnt flow very good, didnt carry the rhymes enough...the second verse had a better scheme going, but both could be better, some ok multis, and the concept was ok, but a bit basic in execution....but not bad drop....pZ

this was wack..just like you~~~

Yeah this was ok....your structure in this was alright, it could use a touch up in a few spots though, some lines were kinda long....flow in this wasnt that good...it fell off in the piece....you had some ok multies in this.....but keep at it.