~Fisrt post~blessing the spot~
 

Expand ya mind wit 3rd eye pupils dialated..
Excersise the brain is the cause of natural laws violated..
Keep reality slightly faded like thought inebrihated..
The best things are easy to destroy but hard to create it..

Love easily turns to hatred if trust becomes betrayal..
Heavens wings become corrupt to manifeast the fallen angel..
All men are created equal was the theme of stars spangled..
But ever since then the whole systems been tangled..

Mangled, the illuminati created a natural fasad..
Trying to take over the world to compete with the force of god..
Its odd, all men have once faught to be free..
But then embrace the very thing that corrupts humanity..

Its insanity, blasphamy, all inhanced wit vanity..
Mutated morality indulged, or can it be..
Bohemeon rhapsity cause nothing really matters..
If u can't stop the wheels in motion though there going ass backwards..

Mans adapted to the ravage, tactics of the savage..
Addicted to the cabbage a life of livin lavish..
Cause the average mans mind state is so leathal..
But its burried by the money the root of all evil..

can see potential here... jus elaborate on the scheme,, it was way to simple.. introduce some multis n carry ya rhyms further... it will improve the read alot.... but work on it... as it was basic,, but decent....pZ

:evilgrin: thanks for the feedback~

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nice first post

well *puts another name on 'do not suck' list* keep elevating

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