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MARVOLoUsJ1009 01-09-04 06:34 AM

Da PuNcHLINE KiNG....new 2 da site peep!!
 
jea..whuts good niggaz im new 2 da site nahmean so ima just drop somthin real quick...

Listen....im from where thugs breed in blocks //
its either play ball,rap or hit da streets with rocs //
but me i dont wanna talk i'll be at ya crib squeezin-gloks //
and put ya lungs on ya ""brakes"" da make ya ""breathin stop"" //
i like when duddes talk greasy it make me just-spark //
and da beam on da 3-80 is dark,i'll leave ya spline in ya green avey and lady in chalk //
and G SYHNE u couldn't ""beat me"" if u gave me ya ""heart"" //
u not nice just ""old and gassed"" like u ""80 and fart"" //
any beef with da kidd i'll move on ya gang //
when da tool clap lead ima ""shoot"" at ya head like its a ""hoop"" on ya brain //
or just put ya dome in da sky and make u ""think in da air"" like ""school on a plane"" //
why rap if ya'll get a deal u wouldn't be shippin-gold //
ima cool dude but waitin 4 a nigga da ""come out his face"" alot like ""pipen's nose"" //
so i could pop up at ya crib and put ""metal"" on ""pussy's"" like ""stripper poles"" //
u niggaz is da type da reach 4 ya hip and fold //
ima let clipps hit ya wig & leave u with ""micro-waves"" but i dont mean dat box u use when ya ""chicken's cold"" //
niggaz hatin probly waitin till im on tour da snipe-me //
my ""punches so sick"" dat ""aids"" is lookin 4 a cure da ""fight me"" //
ya'll dont wanna see-me-rage,cuzz i keep-three-k's //
u dudes suck usin ya ""demo"" as a ""frisby"" a be da only time ya ""cd plays"" //

jea...dat should be enuff if u aint get some of my lines just holla and i'll break it down pause...and if anybody wanna battle just set it up i'll be there...holla at me with some feedback WUN!

Gunman tha Great 01-09-04 09:23 AM

your punchlines are like re-runs "they've all been seen b4" hahahahahahahahahahahahaha damn thats a dope ass punchline that i just made up to comment on yo post damn i'm nice

MARVOLoUsJ1009 01-10-04 12:47 AM

^^^ummm u nice dunn? dick face look at ya record lmaooooo nigga just set up da post u aint gota be a rapbattle.com warrior

TheProphet777 01-10-04 12:50 AM

^do u do audio?...Those lyrics seems for a audio..........U wrote this am i correct?...Or did u just blind spit the whole thing?

FormulaMC 01-10-04 01:04 AM

I Hope It's For An Audio, Cause It Sure As Hell Ain't Flow Good Written Here. . . Ya Verse Was Sloppy. . The Double Quotation Marks Weren't Necessary. . Punches Played. . Some Lines Nice, I Admit, But Of Course They'll Be Nice When I've Heard Um Before N Had The Same Thought. . Maybe If You Do This For Audio It'll Flow. . You Need To Work On Ya Structure. . Even Ya Lines. . Multi's Were Pretty Good. . I Mainly Judge Pieces By Flow. . So This Piece Was Below Average To Me. . Constructive Criticism. . Don't Get All Hyped. Pz.

Katz.Frost 01-10-04 09:25 AM

i thought that shit was dope. would sound better on audio, like most of my shit. you dont sound like a text rapper, u should be on the mic spittin that shit. all your punchlines was dope and i dont like that g-syhne bitch either. keep up the good shit. peace

GeNiuS 01-10-04 10:35 AM

some..most..punches played but a few nice...definetely flowed nice out loud...but for text flow was poorly structured...

haha re runs punch was nice..but played too dunny

Kredit's NOT A Fag 01-10-04 10:38 AM

This was very weak .. Nothing original in the whole piece, got very repetitive to me .. All of your 'ill punchlines' are extremely played and/or fucking homosexual ..

Flow was subpar - seemed like you tried to put too many thoughts into one line or something, and your flow suffered ..

Keep writing, and elevating, please.

Tsar Casm 01-10-04 10:43 AM

Da PuNcHLINE KiNG.....where are the punchlines...?

Trapt Wit 01-10-04 12:02 PM

Punchline king?

The fuck?

Your punches were played and horrible

Penskills 01-10-04 12:41 PM

Quote:
Originally posted by Sarcasm
Da PuNcHLINE KiNG.....where are the punchlines...?


:thefinger ..enough said..

Signifakant 01-10-04 01:39 PM

Quote:
and G SYHNE u couldn't ""beat me"" if u gave me ya ""heart"" //
u not nice just ""old and gassed"" like u ""80 and fart"" //
any beef with da kidd i'll move on ya gang //
when da tool clap lead ima ""shoot"" at ya head like its a ""hoop"" on ya brain //

PunchLine King??..Pff Isn't It Weird How This "PunchLine King" Has Short Ass Bars & He Still Uses Quotes To Signify His Shit In A Bar??
Pfff
Nuff Said

Baron Mynd 01-10-04 02:15 PM

Quote:
Originally posted by Trapt Wit
Punchline king?

The fuck?

Your punches were played and horrible


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