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Maven 01-09-04 11:55 PM

Date Rape w/Edicius
 
Rapist-Maven
Raped-Edicius
that's right ;)

it was a regular night, a good time to unwind
I pulled up with no negative thoughts in mind
I had planned to be kind; women love a gentleman
didn't plan to get laid, only planned for sentiment
So I went to it; rang the doorbell with flowers
the moment she opened up expanded into hours
using her suductive powers she kissed me 'hello'
and the candle lit dinner was prepared well-oh,
what have I gotten myself into here? I thought
turning wealth into fear, rebelling vs what's taught
pulled her close to me, with heart beating faster
undoing pants, thinking "no chance, haven't asked her"
but I forced her on, until she finally said no
and much to my surprise I gave her a bleeding nose
Damn these deceiving hoes! How can a woman cause this?
destroying the paused bliss as she lays there topless
pleading for me to stop this, and I comprehend actions
became a tattered heap of leaps bounds and fractions
seeing her negative reaction; headed for the door
and hardly understanding my own self any more
like a shelf on the floor; existence became redundant
I resort to violence when charm is so abundant?
my single woe was that my mind was unpredictable
I probably ruined her life...fate is so despicable

It looked like fun, facing it at first, i just broke up, & had this thirst..
to comfort,comforting me & he sounded cute, but that became reversed..
& soon for me to find out that this sunshine on the phone,is just a dark cloud..
not a friendly boy scout..but a monster..planning on hurting me with no doubt..
didnt expect him,to plan something dirty,he sounded so pure& trust-worthy..
& sweet understanding, 'perfect' to what i need,not somthing unworthy..
So we decided, to get united at my place, & have some dinner w/ some wine..
he looked real decent, ..& fit..not perfect,but just fine..for me to make mine..
but he underwent a switch, from perfect to a bitch, betraying me ..& i could see..
why , but he forced me to shut up & that i shud hush & dont cry,
he said this was, good! i screamed no because i couldnt lie..
resulted into him gettin more pissed, slapping me hard in my face
confusion took me over, as he was finished, and stepped of me,leaving me there amazed..
My nose was bruised, i was left excused.. used & abused..
naked to the ground,tears inside w/out a sound,small & confused..
he left my house smacking with the door, couldnt take it no more..
i feld like a dolphin on shore, i felt dirty, felt pain & like a whore..
as i strumbled to the shower, with tears, sliding down my face
, ..while i putted te warm water on, i felt so empty & so much space
of emptyness fillin me up, unlikely to the water that was fillin up the tub..
i feld like i was stuck, & strucked by a brutal assault against my will i was fucked!
as the water slide over me i wondered what i did to switch our inviroment into this hate shape..
what did i create,was i acting to afraid ??.... ( I wonder) how this turned into a date rape..
the question's keep firering,pulled of by me, w/ a shout! couldnt take the pressure help me out!
who could i talked to ,who would a listen ?,aaargh the confusion ,finally sliding my wrist's & ending this!

Blade Brown 01-10-04 12:28 AM

that shit was beautiful, i like how it was seen from both point of views, and edicuous' ending was good, really topped it off

good shit from both of you

Menik 01-10-04 01:17 AM

Yeah i agree this was a good piece here....enjoyed the read guys.....Maven, like the imaginary in your verse, it was good....you had nice vocab and nice multies....Edicius, you had good imaginary as well, had some good content, nicevocab and some good flow in it...overall this was a nice collab, enjoyed it.

Edicius 01-10-04 01:27 AM

Thank u all ..

Upper like Dupper

Maven 01-10-04 03:29 PM

skyrocketed

one soul 01-10-04 03:30 PM

nice long as shit..

Tsar Casm 01-10-04 03:40 PM

Why couldn't it of been me in Edicius place...
Ill piece..
I liked the vocab and flow...
how you set up your imagry...
And the content in which I should have been raped in...
props to Maven and edicius(for gettin' the chance)...lol

please don't bet stingy...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105602

code-187 01-10-04 04:19 PM

it was good the way the rap was from two peoples point of views
it was a bit hard to read though coz some of the bar lengths were a bit long.

if you see any of my battles on frontlines.give an honest vote.

Maven 01-11-04 12:25 AM

up

-Zone Out- 01-11-04 12:50 AM

okay..Maven's part was great..smooth flow..I likd the hello/well-oh line..lmao..that shit was funny..but anyway..the song was going great..until I got to edicious verse..it was great too..but the bar lengths fucked it up for me..that was the only thing wrong with the verse was the bar length..better yet that was the only thing wrong with the song..it was great..Date Rape..cool:cool:..

btw..is Edicius really a girl..or was he just rappin' the part?..

Edicius 01-11-04 01:03 AM

Im no gurl, ..yet he still raped me.

-Zone Out- 01-11-04 01:04 AM

yeah..I just seen your pics..my bad..anyway..ummm..I was wondering...umm...CAN I RAPE YOU??...naw just kidding..this was a tight peice though..

Maven 01-11-04 01:05 AM

get your own bitch =)

Mr.Christensen 01-11-04 01:09 AM

Maven...either get on AIM
or in the RB chat room

Edicius 01-11-04 01:11 AM

Upppppppper hoe's..if u pay me more than maven, u can rape me O.o


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