Formula & Kredit {Dreams} *Dope*
 

First Is Me. . Then Kredit. . You Can Tell When Shit Switches. .

Long Day, Working, Slaving, Time For Sleep
Mind Is Weak, I'm Ready To Find Dreams Mystique
I'm Now In Deep, See Myself Walkin' A Desolate Road
Peppermint Dro, Never Had That Type Of Blunt Befo'
Old Man, I See Walkin, Kinda Stalkin, I Shift Quickly
Thas The Enemy Of This Non Reality Based Dream
Seamed Together, It's Like I'm Sleeping With A Quilt In My Head
Man Said He Was, Built From The Dead, But Started To Tilt N Spread
Toxic Fumes, Stockin' Tombs, The Fuck ?, I Knocked This Dude
But He Rocked Me Few, Then His Perfume Entered My Cacoon
Yes, I Was Now A Butterfly, I Wonder Why, What A Predicament
Bustin' Out Of This In Incriments, Suddenly I'm Insignificant
I See Myself As A Youngest Child, Runnin' Wild, But Strangely
A Petite Lady Tames Me, Arranges Me, Then Lifts Me From My Family
Then My Brain Is Like A TV, I Switch Focus, Channel Changed
To Me With A Flannel Chain, That's Insane, Handle My Name
Boys Is Walkin' Up To Me, Talkin' Bout Roughin' Me, One Sentence
Ends There Exsistence, As I Witness Them Vanish Like Folk Witches
Now, I'm Turnin' Over, I'm In A Tree, Lookin' Down Around Me
Nobody In Sight, Crying From Fright, Dying Tonight ? My Mama Found Me
Now I'm Havin' Flashbacks, Ready To Die ? Somebody Asked That
Masked Axe, Murder With No Blood On The Weapon That This Ass Has
I'm Startin' To Sweat And It Seems Like I'm Convulsing, Eyes Come Open
Words Can't Come Out, I'm Chokin', But I Slowly Drift Back To Floatin'
I Lift Facts While I'm Smokin', Yes I'm Back In Dream's Darin' Dimension
Carin' To Mention, That This Prevalant Resident Has A Sudden Evil Nemesis
See Now I'm Being Scripted, Into Another Unknown Circumference
He Has Nothin', He Raps Somethin', But Has Drawn Blanks Like No Ink Runnin'
head to pillow, instead, in bed
the fellow dozes off - thinking on his own behalf
of all the bellows, the laughs,
and storybook endings that he himself could have
he follows a path, the glory
and story behind his thoughts,
caught smack dab in the middle
the riddle is simple, he loves rap
but it's tough to pull strings,
when you're playing second fiddle
sits and twiddles his thumbs, someone
in front, seizing the moment at once,
while his patience rides thin
..wild spin begins in his brain, his fame,
autographs, where he signs his name big,
in hopes of big names signing him
sliding in are his hopes, fantasies
of folks, giving respect that affects his morals and doubts
..blossoming out, his skills flourish
and lash out - but how can he rap about reality,
when he doesn't know what the wrap of reality is about?
here, the esteemed have a theme,
where thoughts all suffice as nice escapes and remedies..
..of a life where rap is a dream,
and the dreams fight with only an alarm clock as its enemy.


** How Bout Reviewing This Shit. . Maybe Quote Some Lines. . We'll Love You Forever And Possibly Offer A Piece Of A Pie. . Whaddya Say ? **

i gotta say that joint was raw had some emotion made me feel where you comin from ya know i like dem lines about ya eyes come open and somethin bout floatin and a nemisis that shit was ill

hit my shit up to mang
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105508

it was aiight. good flow and shit keep it up

What the fuck kind of feedback is that!? One sentence shit, get the fuck out of here.

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You Didn't Even Leave Feedback, So Stfu.

Why the fuck would I leave feedback on my own open mic, dumbfuck.

stfu Kredit. . and gimmie sum pie got damnit.

Long Day, Working, Slaving, Time For Sleep
Mind Is Weak, I'm Ready To Find Dreams Mystique

mult's an flow start off the hook...

Man Said He Was, Built From The Dead, But Started To Tilt N Spread

nice shit..type of stuff that makes yo think...

I See Myself As A Youngest Child, Runnin' Wild, But Strangely
A Petite Lady Tames Me, Arranges Me, Then Lifts Me From My Family

damn multi's an flow in this are absurd..lost it a couple time earlier but DddddDAMNNN..content is...trange to say the least hahaha

He Has Nothin', He Raps Somethin', But Has Drawn Blanks Like No Ink Runnin'

nice piece of wordplay to finish off...flow an content finished off REAL strong in this first part..only 1 multi seemed forced..nice

the riddle is simple, he loves rap
but it's tough to pull strings,
when you're playing second fiddle

haha nice piece...wordplay is there..dont no why i like that part...

autographs, where he signs his name big,
in hopes of big names signing him

the way you flipped that was ill...nice..

** How Bout Reviewing This Shit. . Maybe Quote Some Lines. . We'll Love You Forever And Possibly Offer A Piece Of A Pie. . Whaddya Say ? **

hahahahahreply to this...detailed ofcourse(Cos i had to read a hell of lot an my piece is like 10-12 lines long...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105566

thanks

Thanks for the feed .. can we get more?

helium

word - piece was dope; as far as kredit's part goes.
formula your part was kinda stretched and the content
Was lesser than that of kredit's.

kredit your part had some cool imagery and the flow was nice.
i think you could have went a little deeper with imagery.