horror story- the resurrection (pt 1)
this is a complete re-write on a piece i did 3 years ago. its a story about a man who is killed and comes back to life as a zombie to take revenge on his killers. it too damn long to post in one go (i aint even finsihed re-writing it yet), but enjoy this first chapter. incidentaly, this is the piece that got me my cypher name "johnny 6 feet", since the zombie persona started taking over the raps i was writing then.
i remember the night like it was yesterday/ in my mind, i've tried to construct up a better way/ to deal with the situation i was facing/ but it was fate, making its regal proclamation/ i was on the route home with a girl on my arm/ feeling inside like i had the world in my palm/ the attack came from the back range and such/ 6 men, all of them armed, the pain too much/ it turned out the said lady was the ex of the leader/ he was calling her a cheater, the man's a wife beater/ i fought the best i could but the odds were too high/ it wasnt long before i felt steel from a few guys/ they left me, i realised i was bleeding to death/ the girl ran for her life while i was speeding to rest/ the ambulance was too late, i expired at last/ and so i'm told, my soul-less body was retired to grass/ 6 months past, i dont know where i was at the time/ then my eyes snapped open, i was back in my mind/ i reached out in the dark and felt the coffin lid/ somehow pushed it open with retching and coughing fits/ i clawed upwards through the dirt, kept spitting it out/ to the surface, breathed ait with a split in my mouth/ examined myself, my clothes and my flesh were ragged/ my body was still dead but animated and ravaged/ i realised i had a purpose in this new resurrection/ to take revenge on my killers for my own redemption/ my voice rasped as i cleared my throat, then i spoke/ "this is my oath, all listeners can write this in my quotes/ the six sick fucks who took my soul from the earth/ will all fall victim, my foes will taste dirt!"/ i brushed myself off and grabbed a pipe from the ground/ focused where my enemies soul light could be found/ my instincts told me nothward, i moved forwards/ dragging my weapon behind me, i cursed i four words/ "death to those fuckers!" and as the sun set/ i started to run, set on my task to blood let/ |
well i'm scared!....
Nice bringing it back.. good vocab...and usage.. I would normally say not very creative but you brought back the original..so creative.... just an overall good piece... don't be stingy nahh.. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105602 |
ohh yeah..nice!!..finish it!!..finish it!!1:)..hurry finish it!!..I want to see the part wear he scares them and shit and gets his revenge and his ex girlfriend get fucked and shit..finish it!!!
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Hell yeah that was nice as fuck homie keep at it fo sho cause I wanna see some of yo next peices
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thanks for the positive feedback guys, rest assured part 2 is on the way with plenty of violence in it.
uppin this once^^ |
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