Star Track....(Diss Track)....Must Read
 

This is dedicated..to all you incredibly Wack Crews...

It might be nice to view the New Crew forum during this

X.L.G. You cats’ll never be lyrical, or Xtreme, so why pretend?
You’re the only crew here to mount up more defeats than wins
Your hilarious…your all useless to Rb except to act as fake thugs
‘Aint one “gangsta” real…So I Remixed Illusion into a Gangsta One
They asked me to ghostwrite for ‘em, so it’s true they caint see me
And it’s a fact…I heard it myself …The X.L.G. Album is worse than Gigli
I haven’t reached my Wits End but these wack crews are pushing me near it
The Insane Jokers could have been funnier…if they’re only joke wasn’t their lyrics
I started on Corrupted Visions but I was laughing so hard it fucked up my posture
Until “I gave Sight my Third Eye,” leaned back, and busted a nut on their roster

Cats is wack, they stick tight to they Lines yet I bet none of ‘em Bar That
I try to educate and help ‘em elevate their minds so I stick em’ on Star Tracks

Guess what……

You didn’t think I was done did you? There’s still a couple left to go
I thought it only happened once, but the Land Mindz always blow
And In the middle of it all Central just can’t make their mind up
They wanted to rip shit, but ended up tearing up their line up
Lethal Scriptures will get ya, I’ll fart on ‘em but I’m not gassing
Read their shit and you will seriously drop dead………laughing
I’m father explanation, no need for it wherever my writing went
It was bad luck for these 13, they became my Sonz of Enlightenment
The most hated crew on RB…so there’s no need fro me to ask you
How I reach the quality of your audios when I record in my bathroom

Cats is wack, they stick tight to they Lines yet I bet none of ‘em Bar That
I try to educate and help ‘em elevate their minds so I stick em’ on Star Tracks

X.L.G. You cats’ll never be lyrical, or Xtreme, so why pretend?
You’re the only crew here to mount up more defeats than wins

lololol

the rest was ehhh .. decent but nothing too great, flow was off to me nearer the end but it wasnt bad.

nice piece

^^^word...the first like was hilarious...and htne after..it was all...heard before to say..'cause XLG is kinda played..which is a sad state of affairs..but a good open mic..

don't hate..
Why couldn't it of been me in Edicius place...
Ill piece..
I liked the vocab and flow...
how you set up your imagry...
And the content in which I should have been raped in...
props to Maven and edicius(for gettin' the chance)...lol

please don't bet stingy...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105602

as far open mic diss'es goe this was pretty poor...

realise open mic disses can go further than battle verses because your not restricted to punching...you can drop humour wordplay an personals that wouldnt fit in battles....

‘Aint one “gangsta” real…So I Remixed Illusion into a Gangsta One

had so much potential yet was poorly used...

And it’s a fact…I heard it myself …The X.L.G. Album is worse than Gigli

same here you have the concepts you jus don't seem to have the skill of wording them...

The Insane Jokers could have been funnier…if they’re only joke wasn’t their lyrics

try an stay away from obvious easy to think of disses like this...

I thought it only happened once, but the Land Mindz always blow

hahaha....that was ill wordplay...if you meant blow an not explode...haha

They wanted to rip shit, but ended up tearing up their line up

second verse improving not great but decent...

Read their shit and you will seriously drop dead………laughing

this is really taking advantage of an open mic diss...

ok.this was amateurish a couple decent lines but nice concepts...i only gave such indepth feedback because i see the potential...its like me when i was new...jus need to reword things and practice....decent but below average...nice nonetheless an not a struggle to read...keep dropping nad reply on my piece

thanks...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105566