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Aragorn Vs Edicius..Topical crew battle
blah u know the rules, u are scared to drop b4 me, ill do something quik.
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Graveyards. Emptyness took over... tho most times.. i was forfilled & trilled still the amount was big of tears that i spilled cause of situations,were i could'nt control the frustrations.. & complicated complications,was i made for failure in relations? Questions like that spooked around in my mind, i was so blind.. towards reality,love.. & handling complex situations of any kind.. Makes u wonder .. why did i have to taste the sweetness of joy & have to settle for that few breath moments..was it as a decoy.? Just a lesson from above,to teach me about real life & falling in love but hello there!! isnt this a little to much? i cant just walk out off.. this, the x really got me marked, & pain passed me without remark.. So yes u can say ive being teached,but a new life is what i embarked. a fresh start..with the pureness off snow, a chance for me to re grow & painting a new life precious like a van gogh,w/out the sensation of a talk-show So i closed off that capter..filled w/ pain , struggles & failure drove me close to insane.. after i closed it ,.. i tryed to look back, but i found something i cant explain.. I couldnt find it ne more, .. it was gone, dissapeard..it appeard like.. death did i closed that chapter that well?i mean, its ok , but now nothing ne more is left.. I tryed to reverse it,but to bad, just a big black hole remained still to me unexplained,.. but.. death was allready obtained & yes i played it wrong with my giving cards,& w/ regards but did i ask to look back to my memories,.. simalar as graveyards.? |
My Last Home
Cobbled gravestones...Vaulted masoleums These men have been prayed for...now we no longer see him Wilted Flowers... over intimate engravings Tears shower..words written.. "Now He's God's Baby" Cold spaces...lifeless bodies rest... Rotten Flesh.... for earthworms to digest The scent of candles..a lone woman prays... The flame flickers...now she's buried in the next grave.. Time don't exist here...we all seen our last hour.. Returned to the grain.. for mother earth to devour There's people here from all walks..of life and both genders Those who will be remembered..you never leave once you enter The grass is greener here..but life is not in full bloom We only walk the earth..transparent..during the full moon To stand on this soil's.... like standing on a portal The doorway.... we all have to go thru as a mortal Six Feet...we lie in a scratch on the earth's surface And roam over it's skin in life...searching for purpose But it all ends the same..this lesson in life's hard... Every man that breathes today will someday reach the graveyard |
The topic is Graveyards people.....
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.................................................. ....uppin this....gud battle u 2................................................. ...............................................pz
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this was a pretty good topical battle i think.
Aragorn: You took a basic approach to this...but your story was kinda boring...but you had some good flow in it and some good multies, nice imaginary i thought. Edicius: You had the better verse i thought....you took the better approach to this topic also, i can tell you have more experiance doing topicals, you had some good multies and some nice flow like Aragorn but you did have the better verse for the topic. I also thought you had better imaginary. Vote goes to Edicius for having the better verse overall, props to both. |
Not really even.. in my perspective..
Not only did i enjoyed readin Edicius verse more, His structure was better to. Both sides had some well formulated lines..but Edicius..'story telling' build up, w/e was just better. Some nice vocabulairy from both sides.. But i feel, Edicius had some nice open minded views..that he formulated quite nice. So.. vote Edicius |
Aragorn: Wasnt feelin the 2 way flow to much..i prefer the more solid flow that edicius showed...your lines were kinda deep...nothing amazing..had some double meanings n shit which was good..overall it was a decent verse..just cudda done with more depth and thought
Edicius: Fellin the flow all the way through..you got some dope double meanings to your lines and you thought deeply into them...thats why you get my vote vote: edicius |
Aragons verse..was kind of..bland so to speak..he hit the topic dull..the content was dull...good flow..but just wasn't really there...
Edicius verse..I loved how you approached it..dope..flow was well planned..nice vocab..just an all around better piece... vote-edicius.. |
Oh 4-0 allready ..
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damn this got voted on quickly but good try there aragorn
liked how u did but I have to give this one to Edicious his internal rhyming, story, multies and everything else just gave him this battle .. v/Edicius |
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