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Feeble Minded 01-12-04 10:40 PM

It adds up
 
The numbers and numbers, they're just piling on
cuz i have word problems, with my styling form ..
my problems expone to multiply and increase ..
teacher challenging this, is why he's deceased
the lies do increase, they delay with the hate
till they reach infinity, like an upside down eight
i relay him my fate, and I try to solve it in class ..
teach always said, world revolves around math
right, we agree, 'out numbers where'd we rightfully be?
cuz we'd have to instead get a writing degree :laugh:
other subjects glower at me, they resentfully stare
..so I'd be greatly upset with no parentheses there
the brackets cover them all, canvas the brothers ..
when i can't solve a problem i just cram it with others
in the back of my brain, numbers are harboring me
i couldn't Stanfor it & hadda get a harvard degree
the x's and y's i claim for myself, have fear of no one
couldnt type if cpu's werent made with zeros and ones ..
i hit the nail on the head, in back it gives pleasure
cuz i couldnta done it without an accurate measure ..
one day the decimals came, now theres decibel fame
disturbing your hearing level i wrestle my claim ..
and say math is the key, yall are needin enlightening
cuz who the fuck can survive off reading and writing?

Feeble Minded 01-12-04 10:41 PM

now reply, you know its dope you hoes. I'll be back later with links to replies of mine.

Feeble Minded 01-13-04 08:03 PM

please reply ?

UnEmceeable 01-13-04 10:47 PM

Well....actually....math is really gay, I'm not sure
why you decided to write about it?






lol.....j/k

Anyways...
As always your multi's were right on
Concept was great...excpet it sounded...um... actually it was dripping of sarcasm,
and it might have been overdone, becuase i'm not sure too many people feel
that writing isn't important....

Speaking of math:

till they reach infinity, like an upside down eight

^^^
Actually 8 upside down is still an eight...more of a horizontal 8....lol

I actually liked this peice, I like the voice of all your peices so your good there

Umm....there is something messed up about this drop though....
I think it might be the amount of syllabals in some of the lines is more or less too
noticable, for my liking at least.

Ex:
i relay him my fate, and I try to solve it in class ..(14)
teach always said, world revolves around math (10)

Doesn't sound like much but to hold the flow you have to strecth the words
Simply adding a "the" or finsihing "Teacher" fixes it.....

I can't give to much constructive feedback becuase my writing blows ass but i try...

Overall...8/10

Please drop some good feedback, Link in my sig


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