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3rDegree21 01-12-04 10:40 PM

new hot shit
 
Real quick sumtin... drop some feedback


i got a smooth flow/
drama come i let the uz go (uzi)/
fuck raps i let the heat from my 2's flow/
got no bread ..ya foods low/
yall need to get smart/
cause im still a "hitman" like bret hart/
my rhymes paint fresh pictures like wet art/
I will mac ya main squeeze/
got plenty macs but only the main squeeze/ (damn)
my chain freeze ... bein chilly on the concrete/
plus im ready to take over philly like john street(mayor)/
yall rhyme sweet while i put in time/
yall niggas need to take to 5's to put in dimes/
I put in 9's bullets that play in flesh/
then i take ya cash so i be stay'in fresh/
i got wounds that never felt a scar/
plus i got "hooks" like Kareem Abdul-jabar(bball fans get it)/
imma stay wit the change and stay wit the gun/
holla at me till next time im done/



I will drop the 3 links tommorow.... im bout to go to bed.....

Menik 01-13-04 03:50 PM

You dont need links anymore.

But this was alright....Your structure was ok, it could use touched up in a few spots though i thought, cause your lines were all different lengths.....you had some alright flow in this....try not to repeat the same multies over like you did with main squeeze twice, but you did have some nice multies in there....overall this was alright...keep at it.

Auspicious25 01-13-04 08:13 PM

Man.... that main squeeze line was hot as shit.. its like "mac ya main squeeze".. Pimp your main chick.... And "plenty macs but only the main squeeze"... plenty guns but only the best shoot... Hot shit.. keep it up

Auspicious25 01-14-04 04:21 PM

can the man get some other feed back


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