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*Dreamin of me?* keystyle
a real Quiky but i was bored and i wanted to relaxx..
Drop some feedback good or bad juss anything The day we met yeah it was kinda funny.. u was workin but not the one u get money.. u was twerkin lookin straight bright and sunny.. A while later we was datin' we was goin steady.. i don't know if it was me or u that wasn't ready.. all i know is now i sit back realizin i need ya now.. i miss ya eyes i miss ya smile even the way u sound.. i dream a' you do ya dream a' me, i wish ya would.. i dunno if it's, you or if it's me but, i wish it we could.. get back togetha lovin eachotha, yes we should I wish u felt the same way bout me as i do to u.. dunno if i can go on without u or breathe without u.. im a kid that wants we he cant have is it love.. i dunno but i wanna know am i the one u dream of?.. |
Topic ---> 4/10 Think of more exciting topics, it will make it easier to rap.
Originality ---> 5/10 Same as topic. Rhymes---> 5/10 Your using basic rhymes, use bigger words. Multi's ---> none > Throw in some multi's if u can, Metaphors ---> none > I hope u know what a metaphor is. Flow ---> 6/10 Flow was ok, but could be worked on. Structure ---> 6/10 Ok but again can be worked on. an ok drop i guess, just keep practicin and askin for help with shit and youll elevate alot. just stick with it. |
iight appreciated man i need to elavate..
need some more feedback |
I thought it was awesome. You don't need to improve much.
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uppin
dun dun dun |
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