J CrImInAl \ v / CL
 

Aiight you know the rules...
8 bar min
no d/r or crew or hate votes (obviously)
I'll spit first posted n the wrong forum lol my bad lol!

Aiight check dis.....

CL? Shud be more like LC,
cos this guy's licking more cocks than hardcore page 3's,
You betta get down on one knee and plee,
I got a masters degree on how to kill wack emcee's,

Why did I accept your offer to battle me?
I'll whoop your ass even if you are 6 years older than me,
I leave you with no clue like heroes arch enemies,
But like sherlock my flow flows like elementury,

Your a test of my patience like the S.A.T,
My rhyming so hot it burns you to the fourth degree,
Uk \vs/ the D, Yet I still step away with a victory,
Pinning your arse down like 1..2..3..

Why rap? Return to computer tech,
Never known someone to like going home a nervous wreck!
Like atheritus I'm a pain in your neck,
After my punches hit ya, you hit the deck,quit work, you'll be claiming a disability cheque,

Your face aint known your just a silhouette,
Although I just started here, ask round I got enough respect,
Ill enough to give you a stomach upset, then remove it with a bayonette,
Saw set you in four places like a quartet, causing all voters to reset their best bet,

Peace out waiting for you to spit now yea...

SUBLIMENEM/THOUGHTS//
burn j-CRIMINALz//
VOCal/CHORDS//
with all SORTS//
of DEGREES//
you'll CEASE//
to exist...all ya hear is PLEAS//
CL PLEASE//
stop BEATIN//
stop HITTIN'//
STOP//
dont KILL//
CL WILL//
POP//
ya BRAIN//
put you outta this GAME//
you a BRAVE-MAN//
for battlin out with me..but GRAVESEND//
is where i WILL-SEND//
ya to your final GRAVE-MAN//

lil' 15yr old bitch...a lil' too HIGH YO//
entered the clubb..sippin on MILO//
ya get CLAPPED//
& STABBED//
& thrown in ma boot like DIDO//
frontin' are you SHY-YO//
cryin on ya BIO//that UK peeps hate YOU//
how can they not u Lil FAKE DUDE//
you better off plain SOCCER//
lil WEASEL//
ma PEEPLE//
will smack ya PROPER//
u COCK-SUCKER//
drop the mic and stik to LOLLI-SUCKAZ//
i probably got more hair in ma CHIN//
then u got PUBES//
castrate u with broken TIN//
leave u pissin otta TUBES//
u still got a lot to LEARN//
u aint even got SPERM//
i'm hotter than fire..play wit me and get BURNT//
i'm makin paper outta STATE/AND//
ya lil' fake//
bitches SCRAP/IN'//
for left overs in ma PLATE...

Man...

Uh.. CL...... log off.
That verse was wack.. structure was awful.. no decent punches..
J came a little better, altho the same rhyme that many times ain't the best way to spit..
Better structure, vocab, flow... basically better in all catergorys..

Vote - J Criminal

Cheers for d advice bro
safe 1-0 to me uppin^^^

peace