~~~Battle for our souls~~~
 

Readin-Psalms-to-believers about the dun-of-all-leaders/
~Calming-their-feelings, words "touchin their soul" like the palms-of-Jesus/
Armed-the-regions with tons-of-preachers to warn-n-reach-us/
~Before we form-religions to worship a god-beneath-us/
The dawn-of-leaders born from a virgin but not from-a-fetus/
.....It was truly God's phsyical form-that-greet-us/
Walked across-the-planet to save our souls but the cost-was-drastic/
Sacrifcing his life like how the Boss-had-planned-it/
But the flaws-of-man-kept the whole world lost-in-panic/
The thoughts-of-manic shocked the earth like it was galvanic/
Sellin our souls like merchants servin as servants to the serpent/
Unclean Spirits like foul liquor or the dirt on the surface-/
The burn from the furnace is equal to no other.../
The feeble seek for cover at the first sign of the weavin of thunder/
If you believe in the wonder and the miracles of the merry Christ/
....Then have faith that He'll lead you to paradise.../
At the same time the devil's schemin-some'n-evil/
Sending messengers from Hell disguised as a thief-among-the-people/
Bringing back information as they complete-odd-retreivals
'Bout the 90 feet long steeple buried deep-along-the-upheaval/
Which by looking at it seemed to be-all-primeval/
Sturdy bricks like every other wall-in-medieval-times/
The earth shakes as the demon below the mantles/
Fights with the man wit hair of wool, black staff n brown sandals~/
~In a battle for our souls/

verse from some track i did back some time ago......was a nice song

Not To Bad Although You Need To Work On Fixin Your Structure, Its Not Good To Have Long Streched Lines Just To Let You Know Other Than That It Wuz Pretty Good Quality, Vocab Wuz Straight And The Flow Got Kinda Of Thrown Off Cuz Of The Structure But Yeah Pretty Decent Job

This was alright i thought.....structure was alright, just try to shorten some of your lines down a bit thought, they seemed stretched out....you had some good multies in this, liked that...vocab in this was pretty good i thought too...flow was alright in this, kinda fell off at points though....but overall this was alright...keep at it.

yaya ya i know u rapbattles type.....none of u cats even signed anyways...yall dont do audio tracks

so i know shit flows..........dont need 2 hear dat

yea..u cats prefer rhymes like

cat....bat...hat...sat

lol yall rapbattles niggas wack........thats how yall niggas rhyme in dis bitch....pretty much what i expected from unsigned artists................

and jes 4 the record...ma last post here

yall ever listened to Royce da 5'9?????????? Canibus maybe?????????????????????/

the flow isnt something slow like JAY-Z........................retards

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damn..I was about to compliment you..and say that your bar structure didnt mess up your flow..and that the verse had meaning..but fuck you..dont judge a whole fuckin website just because 2 people said something..and yes..you newbie peice of shit..I listen to Canibus..and Royce the 5'9..and yes..some of us do do audio..and if you're signed shouldnt you be in a studio makin songs?..instead of on the internet?..just a thought..well..anbyway..beyond the gay shit that you're talking..this was a pretty dope peice..and next time..give more people a chance to respond before judginf a whole website..

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