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L.A.STR~E~TZ 01-13-04 08:58 PM

Time in mind
 
The time will undeniably elapse
keeps passing so itll also colapse
The two things are so adjacent
but know theres no replacement
so I always try to comprehend
but my mind tries again to amend
what the hell is the point of livin?
damn, I thought that was a given
majority of the population fade
but if the majoroties also jade
then why the hell do I care
do I sit there with a blank stare?
got a headache but i dont want immediate relief
I just want ease in a belief thats free to keep
am I thinking too much or losing my sanity?
but for me, a sane state of mind isnt primary
So as apprehension goes through my mind, I still waste time
It does not matter to rhyme but that is just my foreign incline...
My feelings will doubtably change but still I find it strange that I feel locked in a cage
locked in a cage by time, yet afraid so I rhyme about a craze as I proggress through my age...

Verbatim 01-13-04 09:04 PM

interesting, I got the message, that you were thinking bout what's the point of life or someting along those lines, we've all been, i've thought bout it once or twice, maybe i got the wrong message i dunno, but overrall, it's was pretty good, nice vocab, flow was aight, wasn't as long as last one so i read it all this time haha, anyway, keep droppin

peace

L.A.STR~E~TZ 01-14-04 07:47 AM

thanx for the reply, ill post up what i was thinkin when i made this poem after a couple more replies...

-GG-

L.A.STR~E~TZ 01-15-04 06:13 PM

uppin, i made sure to give sum replies to yall. how bout sum other ppl return the favor?

-GG-

shawty"B" 01-17-04 01:24 PM

hey this a gud peice...you seem like you wonder about things that hits reality today and you find ways tomake it rhyme... and from the way the message gets across it seems like saying it in a lyrical way comes so easy for you... over all its a great peice


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