Check this battle verse
 

From a quick 10-line battle against Skandalz18 in Front Lines
...still waiting for the dude to show, so I figured I'd get some feedback.

here goes:

I think it's about time for this lame's-ass-to get-ripped-up.
Skandalz? Damn. Were you named-after-a strip-club,
You bitch thug? Now you scared to go straight-up
And get "ate-up" like we both hit two treys and a lay-up?
Yo wait-up, son. Let me give you a breather.
Cuz you'll need it once I beat you damn near to a seizure,
Then ease-ya on top of a stretcher and treat-ya
Just to keep-ya living life with Vanilla Sky features.
Or should I bleed-ya, leave-ya lie in a pool?-Skandalz
"Couldn't see Wormz" if he was a vet takin stool-samples.

come on, now...

uh....hello?

..You should post this on the battle..dumbass!

by the way...shit was wack!

He explained that at the top....
You've got the right ideas for a battle but need to elevate badly....thats all I gotta say