The End .
 

is death or birth, stress or hurt, bless or curse?
life seems to test the worst of this endless earth
an imperfect circle left to work with humanity
filled with senseless jerks that try to fake reality
we take our families to seperate levels of hell
seperating our families from this hell called self
our ground is red, but it isn't from the blood, no
it's from angels hanging from gods hand, that let go ..
we walk we fly we talk we die, but we rarely smile
so in this fall called life i'd like to hug the spiral
love is vital? bullshit, as long as the heart beats
the person breathes, awfully impersonal speech
that lurks in the sheets with semen and cheap wine
i seek time and i need life .. i gaze at the blue ball
so small, yet so immense it makes for a perfect fall
my life's purpose is found inside one moment
i can envision the feelings it will create as hopeless
just like the snowless christmas i never celebrated
plus the new year came belated as demonstrated
filled with hatred in-complacent, the life we live in
class ends in two minutes, so go ahead and finish it

very nice..imaging was perfect, flow flawless, nice little piece
to make u think a little...enjoyed it a lot and good vocab too
hey but can we expect from Sand ...nothin less

haha, thanks anyone else?

Nice deeper meaning throughout.
Imagery was great.

Not really much I can say bad about this.
Good shit Sand.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=106765

^^^mind reading?
Nobody else seems to want to lol

I agree with others..very nice..great imagery..good content..peace..

I agree with others..very nice..great imagery..good content..peace..

nice double post there, thanks for the reply .

i hate getting slept on.

Very nice i must say, the rhyming was sweet, it's like you tried to rhyme every word i dunno, but yeh the flow was sweet, vocab was good, all in it was a very good piece to me, i liked it, nice drop

peace

yeah, i'm dope like that. respect it

^lol at your cocky ass :rolleyes:

dude, this was really dope. I noticed a lot of multies that I always thought were lacking from your pieces. The first line was a great opener, because internal multies make me cream in my pants. You had dope vocab to describe a lot of superficial things that brought the piece back to reality, so to speak, relating what you were saying to lives we actually live. I liked the description of the Earth as "the little blue ball". In the last line...I couldn't tell if you meant that life was the class...or that existence was the class...or if you were actually writing in class and needed finish up...hmm.
my favourite bar was:


the only thing I disliked about this piece was that you seemed very detached. You used to seem very into every piece you wrote, it made me more satisfied.
Peace

all of the above.. =), detached? ehh, i can't relate it to anything in my life even though it is life, i don't like it, so it's hard to write about it ..

Hot lyrics dawg, It's like I was in your shoes. Great vocab and usage. You could be the newest flava. holla

sand that was tight 1 thing i liked is that you kept it down to earth
and that was the best thing you did i think
i hate those people who get up and spit about stupid shit that you cant under stand

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lol, ive been the newest flava ..