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[*¤ÐîMêØñФ* ] 01-14-04 08:45 PM

Im bored/ No title/ :-)
 
Did you hear my heart crying calling your name,
the scream so silent yet filled with every inch of pain/
I feel your presence but my mind plays games,
there`s no-one here not a voice only the patter of rain/
I blink - eyes red and sore - eyes open but only for a tear,
each one falling constant with the beat of my fears//

Do you know im sorry feels like im forever saying i am,
i never wanted this to happen please dont let this be the end/
I put my arms out and pretend your there,
i guess im just hopeing you will still care/

Asking myself questions that i dont want the answers to,
worrying myself and feeling blue/
Wishing you were here and everything was ok,
but nothing ever goes my way//

The Necromancer 01-15-04 12:28 AM

Oh fucking my fucking god fucking. It's fucking you fucking. That's fucking like fucking WOAH! Fucking. And fucking been fucking a fucking LOOOONNNGG fucking time fucking since fucking I've fucking or fucking anyone fucking has fucking seen fucking you fucking. What's fucking up fucking?

Oh wow, I cuss a lot. Don't I?

Anyway, good to see you again.

Damn, this peice was certainly something. I can see how you would be writing it, bored and just scribbling whatever came to mind. I'm feeling like you just wrote down every thought that came, pausing only to see how you can get it to fit in the next line.

And I'm pretty sure I know what you're saying in it. You had a guy friend who is now gone for one reason or another. (Broken up? Off somewhere else? Dead? Etc.) Seperation anxiety can be rough to go through. But stay up though, pain is only temporary.

Hey, it's good knowing your here, [*¤ÐîMêØñФ* ].

~Shalom~

DthsMissingAngel 01-15-04 03:15 PM

Damn. This was amazing. So heartfelt and so much emotion running through this. Something in which I can relate to in so many ways never thought possible. I have felt like that so many times in my life, and to one person especially just waiting. This piece flowed so nicely. I must say that I loved this on all counts. Amazing job. Keep it up.

L.A.STR~E~TZ 01-15-04 06:03 PM

wow, i liked it. i read wat necromancer said but i dont agree. it is very good but not enough to make me say "Oh fucking my fucking god fucking. It's fucking you fucking. That's fucking like fucking WOAH! Fucking. And fucking been fucking a"-and so on. i did like the imagery, very well made. short, too short for my liking but still good. pain stuck out well, but very old topic. still great. i liked it. i dont even have to tell u to keep it up.

The Necromancer 01-16-04 01:43 AM

Quote:
Originally Posted by The Necromancer
Oh fucking my fucking god fucking. It's fucking you fucking. That's fucking like fucking WOAH! Fucking. And fucking been fucking a fucking LOOOONNNGG fucking time fucking since fucking I've fucking or fucking anyone fucking has fucking seen fucking you fucking. What's fucking up fucking?[*¤ÐîMêØñФ* ]?.


Translation:

Oh my god. It's you. That's like fucking WOAH! Fucking. And been a LOOOONNNGG fucking time since I've or fucking anyone has fucking seen you. What's up [*¤ÐîMêØñФ* ]?.

Sorry for any fucking foncusion.

shawty"B" 01-16-04 02:34 PM

very well written and the pain does stick out like L.A.TR~E~TZ says. and i also like that it seems that it came from inside you and not jus because you were bored... you were feeling some sort of emotion.

evilbombsquad 01-17-04 05:46 AM

short, but well explained
i liked the flow too
man i remeber tha dayz when flow wasn't there
so biGG uPPs on that
peAce


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