'Paid tha cost 2 be me' (16 barz)
 

yo, check it...

i paid tha cost to be me-i dont give a fuck if u hate me
rhyme rhymes all the times-and fuck a bitch if she wants me
keep it true the game-i aim 2 impress none of yaahl niggaz
gonner niggaz always chattin how i'ma rap about triggaz
how u figure nigga, 80shots came here to be fake
its like ima chewing off this niggeaz rhymes, 2 have a slice of this cake
iller than a virus, killing you with herpies and colera
take care of beef seriously-bitch-u can respect me if u wanna
i paid the cost to be me, now niggaz wanna take shots
take me anywhere anytime and u can choose the gloks
fuck the vest, i need no armour, all i need is the venue
come with yo niggaz fool, that just means i kill yo cru 2
most of yaahl dick ride to escape the real state-an scared of beef
i aint scared to die nigga-mayne fuck the streetz
if beef comes ima handle it-yaahl haitin me just petrols me
the mo yo hate bitch, is the more i drop skits g/

watupp 80SHOTS...
so think u paid the COST/
i'm a show whooze the BOSS/

jus kiddin..wazzup..
nyce spit..
paid in full...
tell everyone straight up wher u stand
and where u stand....
wihtout even fronting..
respect that...

..You are improving..Peace....

thanks yo
 

thanks yo, ima greatful 4yo feedback-yo ima improving? thanks yo, keep shooting them reply's at me yo!

Yeah this was alright here man....structure in this seemed alright....you had some good flow through out this i thought, it stayed on in this piece....just try adding some more multies to help it out though....but overall this was alright....keep at it.

yo
 

uppin yaahl

thought it was decent in places, but some better vocab would add to the read... also some of ya lines were jus basic..

how u figure nigga, 80shots came here to be fake//
its like ima chewing off this niggeaz rhymes, 2 have a slice of this cake//
^^
add to the scheme and lose these sorta lines... but i ya seem to be getting a bit better, since i last read one of your drops......
return the favour......

yo safe yo, thanks fo tha honest vocab-yo i need to work on my shit-i fell ya dogg. uppin