Short Open Mic
 

Yo on the mic i get deadly like toxins//
throwin these lyrical punches like im boxing//
and im Mike Tyson, spitting lyrical lightning, till im done fighting//
and you can pop ya shots off like kobe//
my verbal swords stay sharp like Shinobi//
Im easily makin you die, slowly//
im a rookie but there aint nothing you could show me//
i eradicate greats, and fakes//
removin everyone aint no escape//
receivin flowers at ya funeral but it aint no date/
my lyrical mistreatment is too much for you to compete wit//
like saddams nuclear weapons, my flows r secret//

just a lil bit up for judgement

any feedback

nice spit kid i'd say its hot u need a bit of flow elvation but outta 10 i give it 7.5
good shit kid
i need a favour check my thread in open mic "need some help"
peace

Short and decent..I liked the simple wordplay and flow..peace..

~Go vote~
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=104404

Yeah this was alright i thought....structure probably could have been better though i think, try keeping the lines the same length though.....probably could have had some better multies but it was still good....had some alright wordplay in there...but overall this was alright....keep at it.

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