This Is How I Felt
 

I smile to cover the pain i contain inside/
Driving me insane, to much cocaine i'm going wild/
Everything i gain is an illusion of the mind/
I've came too far along this road to look behind/
Rearveiw clouded with the legacy of my past/
Cock the clock, look how time went by so fast/
What i gotta do? just pull out a gun and blast/
Finger don't idle on the trigger,i'll breathe my last/
Surpassed, hell gained another soul/
Flippin rhymes in eternal fire, don't sense control/
Like a mole guarding his hole, I'm on patrol/
fulfilled my role, discovered the depth of the rabbit hole/
6 feet .. under they lay my corpse to rest/
Family laughing like this was their one request/
Fail to see my heart is bleeding in my chest/
Bleeding for the memories of childhood i never...had/
Didn't even get to see the face of my real...dad/
Maybe the truth is that this bitch was .. glad/
But in Gods eyes, does that make me a ..bad..girl/
Planted on a battlefield to watch the war un..furl/
Troops passed by fighting not once did see me cry/
To caught in in quarrel to see their daughter die/

can i get a reeeeply!!

LMAO..only the English will get that one..

think.. Craaaig Daviid!

..Nice...Good flow through out the whole ryhme..good scheme and content..keep up the good work~

Nice flow...
I'm more into your poetry however...

Please remove the /'s from the end of lines... it slightly detracts from the enjoyability of the piece...

Like I said... nice flow... not bad word usage..
Decent piece...

Check my piece when you get time "Day and Night"

Nice piece, Flow was definatly there, Vocab was pretty good, The rhyming was really good too, i saw you tried to through in rhyme in between the lines, like "contain and cocaine" anyway, nice drop overall, keep droppin peace

oh if ya wouldn't mind, could you check ou my latest, it's getting slept on big time, the link is in my sig, thanks

peace

yeah Krem i'll check it out..thanks for the replies and Trapt Wit is into my poetry? dayumm..really? wow...