*Worth It* TiLLeYeDie
 

a quick keystyle..
holla

Im sittin here thinkin am i really worth it
im a speck in this huge world should i for-fit
i look to the truth, my heart, for some answers
and this is what i got a tip like topless dancers
i relized if i try i have at least a chance to make it
if i die i might as well juss forget bout it and face it
ive always been true to my self its to late to fake it
im a gunnabe not a wannbe and haters' i can shake it
but i am not gonna ruin it by doin some stupid shit
i mean i looked in the past but the future, ill finish it
but am i worth it...
yes thats the question i have so many answers for
i wont look anywere else sept me shut ya out nd lock the door
too bad if i lose pull a Aliyah and "pick myself up and try again"
i wont quit, never in my life, there is no way ya gunna win
ill conquer you, this time ill go big, and i refuse to go home
i left for a reason a dream i will not stop till i reach my goal
but am i worth it...

some feedback please
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uppin jeexz this shit iz fucked lol

a little basic in terms of vocab, although there was a good message in this piece and i liked the repetition of "but i am worth it", you should add some multis and work on some creative imagery. mayeb come with a full track next time.


keep writing.

..this seemed like it needs lot of work..first your vocab was too simple..at times simplicity works just fine..but..this was not the case..and I agree with ^..you had too many repetive lines..keep on writing..you can only get better..

it wasnt great but it didnt suck you should update the vocab and look for an original topic you got ill potential just keep posting son

Yeah this was ok....this was ok for a keystyle.....just try adding some better multies to your next pieces....up the vocab like people said before....try to fix up the structure a bit as well....but this was ok...just work on your things and you will get it...keep at it.

alrighty keep the feed back goin