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Sykotic Records
PRESENTS…
Kanser- Bullshit Industry Bitches

Listen up!
This about who strikes the hardest~Not~first!
Strike~nerves wit every rhyme I spit inmy~verse,
Studying my rhymes after~im~through?
Critic my shit u cant write is a bitch~move!
U wanted to start a war of intrinsic~fraud,
We can do this on ur own~sitcom-
-and wait for ur audience to~applaud,
Extraterrestrials don’t wanna battle~me,
I control galaxies intergalactically,
Commercial folks wanna~be~down,
Buts instead they get the~beat~down-
-surgical~gown, cuz u a bitch~of~the~town,
Im an experiment gone terribly~bad,
Launching~pads can’t stop me, im raving~mad,
Tie~u~down ina~brown rubber~mask,
And spray ur~ass wit toxic~gas,
Smash~bones of skeletons like bloody~tampons,
Autograph they~coffins wit ur blood on my~crayons,
90% ur fans wear heals is~a~fraud,
I~applaud ur effort for odd~dressed~broad’s,
Fagot u couldn’t reach my~embrace,
If u climbed a million~stair~cases in lady's~laces,
Making the same videos is~embarrassin’,
Fuck! still haven’t seen shit~worth~buyin’,
U use the same lameass~actresses,
Same videos~and~topics ur rhymes~focuses,
Ya’ll better step the fuck~back,
Make u clap~back like u bringing a paintball~gat-
-to a real game~of~gats!
Re~arrange the order of ur~rib-cage,
At close~range like a 12~gage,
Your clumsy~and~dumb like a novelist wit~5 thumbs,
I squish ur rhymes like cracker~crumbs-
-for when the time~comes!
I unload my ammunition and make~u~summersault,
Strike ya wita~jolt harder than lightning~bolts,
I~design~ill~lines in my~spare~time to prove-
-that u don’t want~me~to~shine,
U study~my~rhyme and lay ur vocals~after~mine!
Change~and~re-arrange the position~of ur~brain,
Leave u in~ pain so I can~claim-
-im lyrically~insane!
Kanser travel through~walls to wiretap u~ skulls,
Its~easy taking advantage of~MC’s that r~gullible,
Attack the industry wit 10~axes to pay ur~taxes,
Come at u a second time wit different countertactics,
I take that verse and translate it in~Arabic,
Make u read a passage of a script that’s~magic,
Noticeable wit ur traceable canvas that~I~spit,
Let me dry ya’ll off wit the flames that~I~spit!
Disease the whole~industry starting from me~
~to~Tennessee while im sipping on my~Hennessey,
Scramble the meaning of virtual mind~reading,
To destroy ur rhyme~scheme unconsciously,
Dude, do u wanna battle~me or wrestle~me?
Sounds~to~me your just obsessed~ wit~me!-
-bitch u aighnt better~than~me!!!
Im the tireless~intellect wit the ferocious~dialect,
Connect to~scientists who trace my~wireless specs,
Bitches vocally~project from a night of tightened~sex,
I revert ya’ll~threats to something u can’t interpret~yet…

..I stoped reading after few lines...

why whats wrong...if u read all of it..ud see that it gets better, its justa intro...

kanser

:help: ..okay I read it all...it's okay..but your structure needs lot of work..your content needs work too..peace..

:gfy: click on one of the below :shoot:

i did check it... its was pretty hot. but i got something thats more fixed up and with something that had mor etime put into. i wrote that last one a few days ago ina rush because...personal reasons.. heres this one..its long but i beelive u will like this one better...
Sykotic Records
PRESENTS…

Kanser- Medic


Memories remind~me of rhyming~schemes,
Razor~beams cut sharply like river~streams,
Embolicaly, psychiatrically leaving me~crazy,
When ur~me it’s~easy being a marked~enemy,
Battling~me is not believing my~philosophy,
Give u my house~keys u still couldn’t rob~me,
The realist~issue wont appose to~diss~u,
Whip my ass wit softer~tissue that’s harder than~u,
KANSER the definition of verbal~mythology,
Mathematically leave unseen~apologies,
Im as ob~seen as poetic justice un~seen,
Leave the~gleam in a rotating mob~scene,
Wannabe’s couldn’t help but laugh~at~me,
MC’s left~me standing in a raft at~sea,
Mysterious~Epidaurus lyrics r sick~
~wit my delirious~virus,
KANSER engraved in stone likes its~serious,
Worlds problems is a everyday war~struggle,
Im~probable to~chronicles lives in~trouble,
This sentence can’t over~see the troubles iv~seen,
Im poetically~ready to collect supreme~dreams,
Anarchy~wrath in the streets wit a vapor~bath,
-and leave u alone in my after~math,
I destroy Countries wit my Mitsubishi’s,
Detect virisal~feicies all over ur~PC's,
-leave u in~pieces!-
-Dr. Norton can’t appreciate the~species,
Destruction is the coefficience of mutual~induction,
Sexual~reproduction is my lyrical~reintroduction,
Call~me hateful but I~remain grateful,
Dissing weak~MC’s and~never miserable,

Listen, got my mind on the come~up,
Destroyed fuck ups as I grew~up!
Explain in~detail of the~brail between my~nails,
Set NAVY~seals asail acros~fields-
-and watch~them fail,
17~years~old, mcs couldn’t shovel my~potential,
At the top of~my~level-
- ima be sicker than a~professional,
Was getting~ready bitches were acting~shady,
Hated~me and tried to put~me~out my misery,
My~fellow homies turnin~into enemies,
Couldn’t~believe they wanted to get~rid~of~me,
Spit at ur~fame in~pain of verbal~sprains,
Should I stay in the~game-?
-while enemies taking~aim? I can’t~complain,
Industry chasing my poetic~complexity,
Just to steal my flexibility into~gravity,
Record labels search for Jay Z’s~and~Obies,
Sorry B, the 50’s lined~behind me!
Lyrically forever~tougher than~leather,
Watching weather of Brewer's~mountain heather,
Fuck writing a musical~chorus,
This straight 100 bars im making u~force,
My lyrical acrobatic~Ebonics run~laps,-
-around ur weak 20~tracks,
Fuck~dat! Make ya run like u sippin~on exlax,
Poetic verbal psychology is~sickening,
Conditioning of my transition~air thickening,
Lyrical~high beams keep my~rhymes supreme,
They’ll be an analysis for every line~overseen…

..I read this shit somewhere..I can't recall where..but I'll find out..Biter???

I read both, work on your wrod play. That is way to simplistic to ahve bars that short. Also, your using alright vocab, but not using it at the right times. You have potential, but this just seems like another write to me. It has nothing to really symblify the fact that its you. And that no one else can use your style...
I hope that helped out a little bit, keep elvating hommie...

( PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOR AND CHECK THE OPEN MIC IN MY SIGNATURE, PLZ )

naw...
i posted this shit a while ago on IB..maybe there??? i havent been on there ian while...this is mine man... it was on illbattle...but i doubt u'll find it in the threads because i dunnow here it is ne more...

uppin...

can i get more feedback on this now...i made alot of changes to it and its writen to a beat. i appreciate it.

You bit Canibus...


This about who strikes the hardest~Not~first!


it's actually...
it's about who strikes the hardest not who strikes first...

2nd round KO... that'd be that dope joint vs LL Cool J... You heard that up there in Canada eh..?












and you can take me..?


post it up junior mint...