IceMan187 Vs. Unknown Skillz
 

10-20 lines
blind spit, no due date
no d/r hate votes

unkown you spit first............................................. ...............................

yo this unknown skillz, lets watch him fade//
cus hes like late cable bills, he never gettin paid//
i got a secret weapon for you pests, called RAID//

i step on you bugs, and lay you flat like rugs//
smush ya face in like Japanese Pugs, wit slugs//

leavin ya head full of lead and im takin ya bread//
you saw the name, and became cautious of this thread//
iceman vs. unknown, lyrically ripping your upper half to shreds/
they call you unknown skills, cus your flows not sick... its dead//

0-4 your rhymes must stink like you dont floss//
spin ya ass around, till ya look like kriss kross//
i hope you didnt pay for ur skilly, cus kid you got ripped off//
im pissed off, you pussy, wearin lip gloss//
youll get tossed, im a lyrical boss//
mutherfuckers throw lyrical punches but i catch him like randy Moss
you caught a case of the energizer loss//
cus your loss record keeps goin and going//
my lyric skill keeps flowin and flowing//
while your on your knees and keep blowing//
but like a lawnmower, dogg i keep mowing//

my closer was a bit shitty but i know it was overall hot

uppin this for unkown to see............................................... ..........................

IIGHT

Even though Ice and Me in da same crew//
That doesnt matter....I can make him turn sik and his skin go blue//
I can kik his ass any time...day or night//
Doesnt matter if Im drunk...I can still put up a fight//
I spit out tight disses left to right//
Embarrass him so mcuh he runs outta sight//
He prolly still a momma`s boy and has a teddy bear in his room//
Goes out with his momma everyday to watch the flowers bloom//
I cant fight no more cuz Im already in 2 or 3 battle//
If I do sumthin wrong he prolly gonna go to the mod and tattle//
DONE sorry if i dissed u

uppin 1............................ i cant edit my verse, but there is a few things i could fix,

Iceman easily took this. Both structures and flow was off, but Ice had good personals and a LOT harder punches.

Best line of the battle: (Ice)
iceman vs. unknown, lyrically ripping your upper half to shreds/
they call you unknown skills, cus your flows not sick... its dead//

Open: Ice
Close: Ice
Wordplay: Ice
Punches: Ice
Flow: Unknown
Structure: Unknown
Creativity: Ice
Enjoyment: Ice

Vote: Iceman

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=103166
Return tha favor and hit this wit' an honest vote.

Yo Ice why u post a poll......now u gonna make my record look really bad...............

uppppin hahah , good question, but like prophet said, it would appear you arent very good at this shit, so really elevate and then battle, im only 13 and i got the tactics down good so i kno it aint hard, and you can tell i elevated since my first battle, you on the otherhand look the same every round, work on a new open mic, spend a few days on it, look in dictionaries for words, and the number 1 tool i use, is a synonyms book, it gives you diffrent words with the same meaning like sick=morbid, awesome tool to have, and give it good structure a nice flow, and make sure it all makes sense, then if it works out right, you will be btter believe me, cus then youll kno new vocab, and all the skills, maybe thats why they call you unkown skills, cus you dont know them yet

Ah, good battle. However, easy to pick the winner. Ice Man's punches are the ones that stuck with me so he gets my vote. Unknown has to learn that selling a punch isn't easy, you have to set it up like a joke with the first line for it to land usually. Iceman has this concept down although both verses were lacking somewhat in flow and structure. Iceman takes this.

Drop a vote please http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107574

Opener-Ice
Closer-Ice
Personals-Ice
Meta-Ice
Punches-Ice
Flow-Both
Multis-Both
Structure-Unkown

Overal-Ice

Alright, Ice your verse was pretty bad, I mean you kept to dissing him and that's what got your the win, try to eve out ya lines man, it's to sloppy.

Unkown-You might have won if it wasent for all that self-glorification that you were doing, don't ever do that, keep your sights on dissing your opponet man, come on. your structure was alright, lose the //, they are so noobish.

Forgot to put in my link to my battle:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107578

Newbie battle..
But a some what enjoyable one ..
Iceman takes it with better punches..
& shows he has elevated since his first battle.
..Unknown is getting repetitve.

vote Iceman187