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Holla At Dis Little Ting
Im the opposite to a geek, because i speak with slang/
Thats why my minds out of reach, but atleast my beats/ Can reach these kids on the streets, i mean i dont mean to preach/ Im just an incluenced rapper, a lyricist to teach/ That lifes could be distinguished within days to weaks/ Because life aint as easy, there are so many slaughters/ Plus TV infultrates some images like ITN Reporters/ I know there should be an 8th line to fit in an 8 bar sequence but i dont really care. I was just bored. :evilgrin: Holla :evilgrin: |
Kewl! Short but sweet. It kind of reminds me of the one I wrote. You cant laugh at it because I'm new to rapping. Peeps this:
My name is Alicia, and I'm the one, The definition to the phrase, "Blondes have more fun." I'm from California, but now lives in Montana, But I visit Southern Cali, once a year like Santa. I have my car already, but I only have a permit, Now that I moved, I sit inside my house all day, like a hermit. I listen to all types of music, mostly country and pop, I'm getting rushed to finish my profile, so I'll wrap it up and stop! Hell yeah! We rock! |
Thanx for the commentz - Yours was cool aswell!
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This was ok....your structure needs some work, try keeping your lines around the same length so its structured good and so it helps the flow out...this was simple i thought...try adding some internals and multies to this to make it better...but keep at it.
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