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Haste.. [Ft.. Maven]
Viscosity: Emptiness lurks, but the shadows dissolve evolve from the depths of the earth Problems and fantasies, trying to be fulfilled from the smallest to the top.. we build Architechture blueprints, must work with haste blood, and drips of sweat on the face Fast is the only pace.. no slowness is laced keep workin till ur at the end of the wall and braced Winning is the only solution, cat & mouse as I chased style unduplicated, cant be traced.. problems faced And foe's beaten... so I keep building, till im complete its almost obleet, but the feat, will be matched Undefied levels will be patched.. and beat demons & devil.. must work faster.. to achieve happiness after.. stress will relieve.. Then we will share the laughter... Maven: we need to quicken the pace of this welfare society which is lacking in heart, programmed for propriety attempting to live quietly and die in the same way as their father before them, can't forget him today simply cause the world is heavier than can be fair sitting on the floor cause we can't find a handy chair settling for second best because it's all we achieve in life we retrieve from children who have been deceived by ones who taught them reading, writing and arithmatic divided we fall back to future; together we must stick so we can show the generations that we amount to more than the scientific breakthroughs, the blood & guts & gore over clouds we must soar, where inflamed brains give way to a better brighter future that will overlook today but the freedom will be lacking after we have had a taste don't continue in the status quo, break out & make haste |
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I liked this piece a lot ... Liked the meanin'/concept ... Dope idea ... Gotten across dopely ... Well written ... Flow was easy to follow in both verses easily ... Piece seemed well thought out ...
over clouds we must soar, where inflamed brains give way to a better brighter future that will overlook today so I keep building, till im complete its almost obleet, but the feat, will be matched Undefied levels will be patched.. and beat demons & devil.. must work faster.. to achieve happiness after.. stress will relieve.. Then we will share the laughter... I liked those parts of the verse the best ... They stood out to me ... Nice job here to both of ya'll ... Keep em comin' ... Peace |
thanks man...
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cmon... uppin this shit lets go
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good stuff.........2 different entirely diff angles, from welfare reforms to demons........both verses had decent flow, easy to read, both rhyme schemes were solid...could be improved, but i think it was a good drop....keep it up, stay real, peace, 1
p.s its kinda funny that soft focus did a collab with word perferct before we have the crew battle |
haha.. Maven is coo so it dont matter...
thanks fo reply tho |
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up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is a dope piece cmon |
Wat The Fuck Up
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Grrr you don't need so many ups..Delete the other upping posts :p
Oh and twas a nice collab you two, you bothed worked well with the concept and managed to keep it diverse...I'd reply more in depth but I'm in a hurry(how relevant to the thread) LOL |
lol^^
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yo u fuckers reply
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thats like the illest thing ever
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This was pretty cool. Vis came decent with it. I wasnt feeling the rhyme scheme at the beggining but it turned out pretty good. Maven came nice with it as well. This was a nice read.
Fav lines from Vis: Undefied levels will be patched.. and beat demons & devil.. must work faster.. to achieve happiness after.. stress will relieve.. Then we will share the laughter... Fav line from Maven: attempting to live quietly and die in the same way ^That was the illest line in the whole piece. Nice work fellas. Please drop feedback here: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111511 Ps. are you the same Vis from Lyrical War and RTM?... |
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