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Viscosity 01-17-04 02:59 PM

Haste.. [Ft.. Maven]
 
Viscosity:
Emptiness lurks, but the shadows dissolve
evolve from the depths of the earth
Problems and fantasies, trying to be fulfilled
from the smallest to the top.. we build
Architechture blueprints, must work with haste
blood, and drips of sweat on the face
Fast is the only pace.. no slowness is laced
keep workin till ur at the end of the wall and braced
Winning is the only solution, cat & mouse as I chased
style unduplicated, cant be traced.. problems faced
And foe's beaten... so I keep building, till im complete
its almost obleet, but the feat, will be matched
Undefied levels will be patched.. and beat
demons & devil.. must work faster.. to achieve
happiness after.. stress will relieve..
Then we will share the laughter...

Maven:
we need to quicken the pace of this welfare society
which is lacking in heart, programmed for propriety
attempting to live quietly and die in the same way
as their father before them, can't forget him today
simply cause the world is heavier than can be fair
sitting on the floor cause we can't find a handy chair
settling for second best because it's all we achieve
in life we retrieve from children who have been deceived
by ones who taught them reading, writing and arithmatic
divided we fall back to future; together we must stick
so we can show the generations that we amount to more
than the scientific breakthroughs, the blood & guts & gore
over clouds we must soar, where inflamed brains give way
to a better brighter future that will overlook today
but the freedom will be lacking after we have had a taste
don't continue in the status quo, break out & make haste

Viscosity 01-17-04 03:30 PM

up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

MeNTiLL 01-17-04 03:51 PM

I liked this piece a lot ... Liked the meanin'/concept ... Dope idea ... Gotten across dopely ... Well written ... Flow was easy to follow in both verses easily ... Piece seemed well thought out ...

over clouds we must soar, where inflamed brains give way
to a better brighter future that will overlook today

so I keep building, till im complete
its almost obleet, but the feat, will be matched
Undefied levels will be patched.. and beat
demons & devil.. must work faster.. to achieve
happiness after.. stress will relieve..
Then we will share the laughter...


I liked those parts of the verse the best ... They stood out to me ... Nice job here to both of ya'll ... Keep em comin' ... Peace

Viscosity 01-17-04 04:53 PM

thanks man...

Viscosity 01-17-04 05:34 PM

cmon... uppin this shit lets go

Key-Low 01-17-04 07:12 PM

good stuff.........2 different entirely diff angles, from welfare reforms to demons........both verses had decent flow, easy to read, both rhyme schemes were solid...could be improved, but i think it was a good drop....keep it up, stay real, peace, 1

p.s its kinda funny that soft focus did a collab with word perferct before we have the crew battle

Viscosity 01-17-04 08:25 PM

haha.. Maven is coo so it dont matter...
thanks fo reply tho

Viscosity 01-17-04 11:56 PM

upp

Viscosity 01-18-04 11:56 AM

up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is a dope piece cmon

Viscosity 01-18-04 01:07 PM

Wat The Fuck Up

N-Demik 01-18-04 01:16 PM

Grrr you don't need so many ups..Delete the other upping posts :p

Oh and twas a nice collab you two, you bothed worked well with the concept and managed to keep it diverse...I'd reply more in depth but I'm in a hurry(how relevant to the thread) LOL

Viscosity 01-19-04 03:31 PM

lol^^

Viscosity 01-19-04 05:11 PM

yo u fuckers reply

MC_Merc 02-01-04 08:00 PM

thats like the illest thing ever

Archival 02-02-04 12:45 AM

This was pretty cool. Vis came decent with it. I wasnt feeling the rhyme scheme at the beggining but it turned out pretty good. Maven came nice with it as well. This was a nice read.

Fav lines from Vis:
Undefied levels will be patched.. and beat
demons & devil.. must work faster.. to achieve
happiness after.. stress will relieve..
Then we will share the laughter...

Fav line from Maven:
attempting to live quietly and die in the same way

^That was the illest line in the whole piece.

Nice work fellas.

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111511

Ps. are you the same Vis from Lyrical War and RTM?...


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