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New to rap.. Please Peep this.
One friday night, you go an cheat your girl//
You come back home, find your shit in a whirl// you look n you twirl, as she starts to explain// it kills your thoughts.. like a dart in the brain// when its all over, n tha dust starts to settle// she thorws your ass out, n calls you a rebel// you try to stand up, but your pain holds you down// you wanna cry n scream, but there's people around// I suddenly become your best friend.. an your counceler// But i screw you over, and tell you what to anounce to her// so you run back home, get tha girl n pounce on her// say your mad n gonna kill her, to which she gonna answer// she calls you a bitch, so the script gets fliped like a circus clown dancer, you prance upon clips// go on a shootin' spree, come looking for me// Asking for help on what to say you see// I Lie... steal you girlfrind n blast her// You find out the next day, call me a bastard// Upset or sad? Pop sum orange colour tic-taks// Depressed? Slam some syringes n other nick naks// But till you do that, you need balls n your dick back// fukin pussy. bitch.// - Notes.. this was semi based on a true story.. as i said earlier.. new to rap n stuff.. always a lurker on these boards.. sum dope people here.. anyway.. waitin for feed back. EDIT: Fixed a bad spelling mistake :P |
dis was an alright peice, it had some lines
dat i liked, u got potensial, stay up try using analogiez instead of da same wordz all da time 2 livin up da read peace |
nice ryhmin man u got skill
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Thanx guys.. after reading it a second time.. i understand what you say la4lyfe.. i'll change sum common words on my next peice :)
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