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Auspicious vs. SkiddZ (Topical)
Topic: Hell In Heaven's Presence
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Hell In heaven's Presence
I walked Jacob's Staircase, Angels Faces Bent The Twisted Vent, Evil in their Heavenly Scent They looked upon me, Eyes shifting Suddenly They thought I was hear to create Havoc, Arguably I walked in front of them, Mocking their own Mocks And as i walked, I felt Heavenly Nirvana in all Shock The Embers firing from my Image, Burning in Place The Mistake, Climbing Israel's Ladder, In his Place The Jealousy and Envy That I walked to Represent To Repent, the sins I committed, Of my Intent Face to Face with My Enemies Creator, My Hate Wouldn't let me Escape, With My Own Mistakes... But Fate, Lead Me on, to the Opening of Peters Gate The Hate in My eyes, Greeted the Love in His I realized, That He loved Me Still, He Knew of This The Alpha, The Omega, The Beginning And The End Either Way I knew My Fate, I don't need to Pretend This Feeling, We know Opposites Still Attract Accident In My Mind... Can't Keep My Train Of Thought Intact Yes.. How He bungles My Mind, I'm Still Shitless Sepents decieve, I have to follow My Instinct I was the Hell in Heaven's Presence In the Above The Apocalypse was Over... The Devil Committed Suicide, walking into Gods Love |
Hell In Heavens Presence
Why have a message? when people constantly missed it? What would be the afterlife.. if niether heaven nor hell existed? Clear iniquities stick to me for sayings of excusless words What would parables be if God shook the hand of lucifers? Would Fear Relinquish?.. Relapse Facts That Second Rate.. or Would The Devils Minions.. Meet For War at Heavens Gates.. When They Met Up.. Would They Forget Truth? Would They Catch Up.. Or Pretend To? ..Lost Beyond Faith.. Lost anticipation.. tore him apart God n' Satan.. played tug of war w/ his heart He lost focus.. n' has faded seeing Never noticed.. a greater being Severed hopeless.. unabled dreaming Mind broken.. on a path mis-leading His mother strangled.. but he wouldn't bother Fallen angels.. death caused by his father One in heaven, one in hell.. he felt belittled Un-sure but felt.. he should work the middle Begin his mornins.. w. thoughts he left behind he was all for it.. but it wasn't deaths design He needed help.. for ambition, then fears where would he see himself.. in ten years? he was troubled.. for more soften he got n' yet puzzled.. cuz satan was present more often than not he'd stop still.. he had his fingers on, but just couldn't name it if it be gods will.. then why was it so difficult to obtain it? His whole life on the fence.. as he calmed his head As he took his last step.. off the balcony edge...... Where he was, he could not believe it.. not where he was wanted so Flipped off Satans demons.. n' Drank from Gabriels gauntlet.. God discussed his life.. for a mistaken one.. Until he pulled out a knife.. for this man was satans son Is life ready? or is life forgettable? will you be ready, when we face the enivitable? will you be un-certain? or believe the faith? are the prophecies true, or just seem to be that way? Will There Be Warm Tempers or Embers of Cold Affection? If Hells At Heavens Gates Will The Gates Uphold The Heavens? blah |
Uppin.. comeon.....................
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Nice battle guys...
Skiddz: Imagery was good, couldve gone a bit further, You had a pretty consistent set of voice and an overall nice piece. Some parts couldve had some fixing on because in some parts you got off topic, but all in all, it was a nice piece. Auspicious: Just as i would expect, you had a very nice piece. Your piece's perspective was different from Skiddz, and thats definately a plus, because usually when you go second, you might have stolen some ideas from your opponent and you might not have known but that clearly didnt happen. Great imagery and a consistent set of voice. You were on topic and your piece was good enough to take this match. Vote-Auspicious |
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A vote? for the love of god.
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Nice piece both.
But I'm gonna honestly have to give this to 'Spish. I liked the approach he took better, the angle or perspective. What ever you wanna call it. Skiddz wasnt really getting at the topic and went off a few times. But other than that, both were good. Vote-Auspicious. |
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Dope shit...
Both came incredibly Good Both had good flow... Auspicious had nice multies And imagery... Good vocabulary SkiddZ came dope also But his imagery wasn't as good as Auspicous's.... Imma go with Auspicious on this one His was a bit more creative also... Vote-Auspicious |
some fucking ill shit here,, both came good with good vocab flow was on point......
............ Skiddz is a better topical write then a battle and this prove its,, i also think the same with auspicious... i was juss about to vote but remembered i am in the same crew as skiddz,,, well done to both then.,. i wont sway by saying who i was going to vote for but good luck to you both |
alright...
Skiddz; decent verse seemed like you really wanted to make this enchanting with your imagery and use of analogies....My personal opinion is that you put effort in it, but not as much came out of it...seemed like you tried really hard to compete with Aus... Your ending really threw me off with the over all structure and rhyme scheme.... Yes.. How He bungles My Mind, I'm Still Shitless Sepents decieve, I have to follow My Instinct I was the Hell in Heaven's Presence In the Above The Apocalypse was Over... The Devil Committed Suicide, walking into Gods Love The use of slang and cursing in this ending was of poor judgement...I would have personally never used it....I feel it takes from the feeling of the piece/// Aus.....Nice piece....kept with good structure....couple times i had to reread a sentence or so but overall and easy read...I enjoyed your intro and your outro felt you really grasp'd what you were intending on writing for this topic...nice work man Vote= Aus |
this was a tight battle....vivid imagery throughout..
Skiddz...that was some tight ass shit man...good verse..I enjoyed it Aus...Man you just continue to surprise me...when I think you can't get better you do. Tight verse....insane imagery..loved it Vote Aus.. Check My Battles. Let's Make Elevated not so sleepy...zzzzzzzzzz.. |
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