You see my life...
 

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/t...ngliljmusic.htm

can yall hit the song up and tell me what u think of the chorus...its a little edgy for now...but ill reedit...i just wanna know what yall think....please no hate feedback...have comments on what should be done or if its good but needs more stuff This will help me elevate on my ideas

Just redited the chorus...mind the first post......hit the link up though....hope someone likes it.....

..........................................ok i guess u guys can close this since nobody is goign to hit this shit up

yo dont have that attitude cuzzin... sooner a later people start to notice u and will reply... stay up
anyways yo this beat is sick.... ya hook need a little work though.. it just seem a little unclear--- lyrically its straight though ... just get the quality a lil clearer

if u got time peep me http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108080

uno

your soundclick page was down.. when i tried to peep.. but i'll be back later on today...and edit this post with some feedback.

You try to hit to many sylables in the refrain

Your vocals need to go up a little

I like the beat

why so short?

Just postive critisism

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/t...sticatmusic.htm

this my stuff

liked the beat.

i guess you was trying to get deep in this song.. so props on the attempt.

didn't really like the flow tho... seems you was trying to fit too many words in one bar.

other than that... the quality was a lil, eh... wasn't too clear. a little scratchy in fact.

decent track i guess... just need to work on cutting down them bars.

yeah i got the track fixed now...never got the chance to upload it......sorry is better now...a lot of better shit now

this is for a collab for me him n denial ....but i think the hook is aight...its good....so we can work with it...good work though TP777.....