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Shit Starters
Some people pissed me off by talkin shit bout me to my
ex-girlfriend so I wrote this out of anger Why are people always tryn'a get me into shit False accusations are things I wont ever admit Yeah I split wid my girl, and no I dont regret it But there was no other girl that I was flirtin with So quit the bullshit, stop all the fuckin bitchin Were we flirtin if we were just sat in the kitchen You went stitchin me up over somethin I didnt do I wouldnt mind as much, If the bullshit was true But why? Me and Vicki we were already through Now these rumours are somethin I'm gettin used to So fuck you, I wont let this shit just pass and go Damn, It's like the Jerry Springer Show... Now I aint guilty, you cant prove it, dont even try I will claim my innocence until the day that I die I finished Vicki coz I felt our waters had ran dry Dont get me wrong, I never meant to make her cry So why do you spread lies? Bitch there just phoney I hope you grow up to be, alone, cold and lonely Your only makin these damn kids follow your lead So all your mutherfuckin words will be believed Well guess what, all your lies have been recieved You made me angry, but Vicki's fuckin heart bleeds I hope you read this someday and fall down, faint Bitch I hope your sorry, coz I certainly aint... Feedback please!! |
thought this was a pretty good drop... could have done with some internals to flip the rhyme... but the sceme was still good,, the way you carried the rhyme... and you got ya feeling across... so nice drop man...
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oh and im wanting to join the crew... would have edited the post,, btu i like to free post..lmao.... get back at me
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Your in.....go check out the roster in our subfurum within the forum.....in other words go to Instant then go to Perfection
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yea i think this was Good LM very True In Some cases There is alot of people u try and start shit....I think ya Structure in this was Very Good.....i think ya Hve a good topical Style....i think ya came good in both Verse....PeacE
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Yeah thanks...uppin
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iight...
this was a tight piece... flow was excellent, as was structure... very good... a could relate to this... which means its gota be good... cant find any contructive critisizem... its all good man... keep it up! OUT |
Nice..........flow........wordplay..........vocab. ......=nice
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Uppin
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This woz some nice shit, The flow worked well and was consistant, you had a topic which you did well with. vocab could of been better but you prob ment to keep it like that. I cant really fault it.
Fave line = So why do you spread lies? Bitch there just phoney I hope you grow up to be, alone, cold and lonely |
that was good, it flowed really well and the topic was good and made sense but like sniper said ur range of vocab wasnt very good ive looked at a few if you battles and this is something ive noticed about u , if u just work on ur vocablary u could improve alot
return da favour http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108195 |
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