i see a lot of ....in the open mic forum
 

i see a lot of desperate people hiding behind lyrics-
yall say yalls life is so thugged out but fear it?-
Look dawg you needed to hear it -
Im poor on the reals, yall cant live my life-
if you tried, never had what i wanted but never cried-
looking sly-
creeping thru alleys-
me, my niggaz and mowie wowie-
but f*** my niggaz they can get a long without me-
Tell me how many of yalll relate to this and ill tell yall which one of you is is really coming from a hood grown point of view.

Not feeling it.. im not pickey on structure.. but this was too far out.. and it was too plain. sorry.

Yeah this wasnt that good.....structure could be fixed up a bit though....try adding some better multies to this though as well....the flow was ok, but it could have been a bit better.....vocab could be up'd a bit also...just keep elevating and keep at it.

..what was the point of this???

hahahahahaha@him censoring himself.its ok dogg your mom aint gon read your post feel free to curse

i agree with penskills... whats the point... now, it could have been a good concept.. if i did it..lol... but ya put nuthin into it... so basically, this werent any good..... too basic in all aspects......