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Feeble 01-20-04 03:20 PM

Feeble vs .:FreemaN:.
 
rules you made;
10 minutes to spit
10 lines max
house rules

Freeman 01-20-04 03:28 PM

sorry.... jus doin topical verse against 777...

startin this verse now.....................

good luck......

Freeman 01-20-04 03:35 PM

Rhymin like a bitch, jus gona leave you slangin in a ditch
This little fucker is more annoyin than an itch you cant reach
By the time you've read this, you'll be ruined and broke
So wrap the keyboard wire around your neck and choke
The Grim Reaper calls for u, ur death by my lyrics will be cold
Your jus a cheap immitation, a rip off, jus like white gold
Breakin down this bitch, leave him stuck in a full body cast
Leave you on crutches, left behind and totally surpassed
The only way you could raise any funds, is by lifting a till
Now do everyone a favour...
... and O/D on some sleepin pills

Feeble 01-20-04 03:47 PM

In battle you don't meet the limit that you scoff about
whereas i'm instant, like maxwell coffee house ...
I've taken over Front Lines, & I've seen your hated ..
& this is the peon process: i make freeman slaves kid ..
your overrated, why battle when you've known that i kill
losings a steep price to pay..
...now your age aint the only place your over the hill...
contributin to charity, I decided to help out the lowly beings..
but i thought... might as well send it straight to freeman...
your promise to whip my ass, it just aint scarin me
cuz your ommiting the truth, like most guarantees...

Diverse 01-20-04 03:58 PM

Rhymin like a bitch, jus gona leave you slangin in a ditch
This little fucker is more annoyin than an itch you cant reach
weak opener
By the time you've read this, you'll be ruined and broke
So wrap the keyboard wire around your neck and choke
decent but kinda played
The Grim Reaper calls for u, ur death by my lyrics will be cold
Your jus a cheap immitation, a rip off, jus like white gold
better but it's too much filler
Breakin down this bitch, leave him stuck in a full body cast
Leave you on crutches, left behind and totally surpassed
ehh..not feelin this one
The only way you could raise any funds, is by lifting a till
Now do everyone a favour...
... and O/D on some sleepin pills
pretty good closer....best part of your entire verse, it wasn't bad but you didn't get very personal at all....


In battle you don't meet the limit that you scoff about
whereas i'm instant, like maxwell coffee house ...
funny ass opener...good
I've taken over Front Lines, & I've seen your hated ..
& this is the peon process: i make freeman slaves kid ..
2nd line is good.....
your overrated, why battle when you've known that i kill
losings a steep price to pay..
...now your age aint the only place your over the hill...
another good punch.....
contributin to charity, I decided to help out the lowly beings..
but i thought... might as well send it straight to freeman...
first line good...overall it was okay...too much filler
your promise to whip my ass, it just aint scarin me
cuz your ommiting the truth, like most guarantees...
closer was good just like your opener....

overall:feeble took this battle and ran with it...he had more creative punches and personals and a nice use of wordplay....feeble hit me up on IM when you are ready to start our battle (diversemc) or PM me....

Diverse 01-20-04 04:02 PM

forgot to say, drop an honest vote on the link in my sig please...

Malice 01-20-04 04:02 PM

Freeman~
"Rhymin like a bitch, jus gona leave you slangin in a ditch
This little fucker is more annoyin than an itch you cant reach"<Dont really understand it> Ok

"The Grim Reaper calls for u, ur death by my lyrics will be cold
Your jus a cheap immitation, a rip off, jus like white gold"<original>

"The only way you could raise any funds, is by lifting a till
Now do everyone a favour...
... and O/D on some sleepin pills"<arite closer>

Feeble~
"In battle you don't meet the limit that you scoff about
whereas i'm instant, like maxwell coffee house ..."<good start I like dat a lot>

"why battle when you've known that i kill
losings a steep price to pay..
...now your age aint the only place your over the hill..."<? ok guess it made sense to u>

"your promise to whip my ass, it just aint scarin me
cuz your ommiting the truth, like most guarantees..."<good closer>

Over all you both had an arite battle, some of the tuff was jus worded weird.... but my vote goes to........ FEEBLE! I like his beginning and closer more, in life the things u remember the most about an experience are the beginning an the end! Good luck to both of u!
Vote--FEEBLE

Feeble 01-20-04 05:59 PM

uppin

SyaNidal 01-20-04 06:58 PM

feeble takes it for better wordplay and personals with harder more consistant punches he just came harder thats all it wus dont get me wrong freeman came ol but he didnt come hard enuff... My VOte-Feebs... yall return the favorr wit honest votes on battles in my sig....
Pz... _-SyaNidal-_

mc aines 01-20-04 07:10 PM

I say freeman took this 1 y?as i liked his wordplay but i also like feebles i felt freemans punches more......sum of feebles lines i just didnt get....others mite get them but i didnt......ma fav line in this battle was from free....

The Grim Reaper calls for u, ur death by my lyrics will be cold
Your jus a cheap immitation, a rip off, jus like white gold


^ dis line made me laugh....

this battle goes 2 free in my opinion

Wise Ways 01-20-04 07:17 PM

No contest...

Sorry Free... your seemed like a straight freestyle... without that many disses
Tha first bar didn't even rhyme.... and punches was weak...mostly filler

Feeble came aight... not that great.. good punches and personals..
nice over tha hill line.. and tha closer was cool...

So

V/ Feeble...

drop an honest vote on this.... thanks
^
Word

I'm hoping to go to college

I probably will but.. I'm getting a little discouraged..

Oh well.. I know I'll be partying..

No worries....Just how to get tha papes

Wise Ways 01-20-04 07:19 PM

Ignore tha stuff under drop an honest vote... that was something i copy/pasted earlier

Heres tha link

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...t=108357&page=1

Mac Dre 01-20-04 07:23 PM

Thought this was a semi coo battle..shit seen both u come harder..
but L L L champ..an u spit that ..no matter wut tho dawg u took that battle..shit was tite..tho liked ya personals...the most...alot of nuthin from freeman..

Vote- Feeble...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108395

Hit it up honestly..an Feeble..polls shud be 2-0 me..look at who voted already...
thanks tho pc

Freeman 01-20-04 07:29 PM

w/e... did u even say what you liked? it was jus tite... ok... cant poll neway so it dont matter...

uppin #1... can you break it down please... i'd like to know how a can improve on it... its called a real vote...

thanks...

good battle Feeble

OUT

rule 01-20-04 07:48 PM

This was a good battle.

Freeman. I expected better, your opener was very simple and not to complex...for an opener you want something good that hits hard..but your personals lacked...you basically only had punches..were as personals kinda win a battle. but over all basic verse...but good. Could work on personals.

Feeble. You had a more concrete verse. which you put together nicely in a short period of time. your punches hit harder then freeman even though some lines i didnt think rhymed but still were good. nothing much more to say...but i didn't find any personls which was odd i thought you would'a had some.

Over all. Feeble took this. with harder hittin punches. freeman good verse but work on personals cuz i'm sure you could of came up with some.


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