[pre]Viscosity vs Mad Man
 

Verses Due: Saturday, January 24th 2004
Voting Ends: Monday, January 26th 2004

Topic: Learning To Fly

dope topic
o' and checkin in..
gl Mad Man

I am In Like Glish

votes:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108523

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...d.php?p=1124323

The circle of life sits beneath me
I fly discretly..the world lies underneath me
Effortlesly, flying over the sea..
What was once huge, is now speck's of people
My mind is feeble, opened to this new variety
This new defied destiny is lethal..
The things I never thought I'd see-till
I began to fly... as I begin to soar in the sky
The world becomes dim, and shadow's trim my eye
River's flow, and my heart open's..
My destiny begin's to grow, and I ressurect
Bravery and hope grows like I flex
Deep blue sky, I seep, soar in the sky's eye
Plane lands, and im still flyin in my mind
Because i've completed the design, and
finished the plans... because I learned to
soar in sky.... one of the few - who can fly

The fall seems too much, I am too afraid to leave
You said I'd be great things, but I do not believe
I'm not as strong, now that you are gone
I can't sleep, I wipe away tears at dawn
I need guidance in my life, I can't deal, I am still too young
All this came out of nowhere, and out the window I was flung
I'm falling, not flying, it looks like their's no future for me
I hear the words you use to say "All you have to do is believe"
Your love carries me on, your love keeps me strong
It feels like I'm being beckoned from the life beyond
I will not take the shit they give, I will be who I am
I will be what you wanted me to, I will be the creme da la creme
But the nest is so small, and the world is so big
I don't want my legs to fly away from this twig
But I won't live in the past, and I won't let your memory die
I start to flap my wings, I lift from the ground, I am just learning to fly.

I Think Mad Man Took This One. He Had A Better Visual Picture Created.
It Was The Imagery And The Way His Verse Was Written.

V: Mad Man

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I must go with Mad Man...!!

I SOO felt this piece....U had an amaizing topic...Viscosity- I think u wasted this topic...

I was intregued by the way Mad Mans bar structure (line length) fitted....

Good Work....U used the topic to show some part of ur writtin ability as much as u could...

Mad Man

Vote: Mad Man

Viscosity....your peice was bad.....Likem Big said: "You wasted this topic" ..too bad too

MM: You dropped a really interesting peice. Probly the same view I would have taken on the topic. Imagery was good, and your content kept me reading. Nice,

Ups to both.

P.S. to mods....I'm Wr!te Mind

viscosity-hmmm...this piece was very well constructed. It had some quality lines. It just seemed like you were rambling though...didn't really bring the topic to life.

mad man- I like the idea of falling and then saving yourself at the last minute. This piece was so dope, largely because it can be related to lives of a lot of people. good job.

v/mad man

Mad Man Wins