Dynasty Soldiers Presents: Hope Washed Away
 

Dynasty Soldiers Presents: Hope Washed Away

Once more Hope has washed away
Everyone wants it not to go and to stay
Nothing can stop it cuz its already gone
Have it one day then its gone by dawn
Cant save it now cuz it has withdrawn
Oh well we will try to catch it again
It will come back some day,but when?

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nice but man...i can kik you out of the park.

nice
 

nice stuff man, a bit soapy though.

vocab-8/10
rhyme scheme-8/10
message-7/10
similes and metas-6/10
feelings-8/10
overall-37/50

good but could be better

Hmm..Short and simple. I get the message from it. I think it could be a bit better. Im not saying its not good, cause it is. Work on your vocab a little...Just some of adive for yah ;)

peAce