Disruptive Mind
 

*Lyrics for an audio*
I was working on a song today. Wasn't gettin much luck so I just started writing down whatever came to my head. Anyways, dis is what I came up with, I think it's alrite, so i wanna get sum feedback on it.

I must be a legend, my mind is a weapon
Fires thoughts goin out at 6 thou. a second
it's considered a present, to be my aquaintance
Once my barrel shows smoke, enemies are high maintenace
gots no patience for the tainted, a worlds ignoramis
check out this cat Davis, can't be better stated
Man once asked whats a quick way to get rich
I pulled out the gun and said "here's a hollow tip"
Love ain't a part of me, I never saw barney
life has so many battles, you'd think im in the army
Enlisted, but wearin no suit, though imma recruit
cuz uniform consists of a hoodie n boots
The streets where my battles occur, guts n glore
wanna die for what I love just like Tupac Shakur
but just a lil more, than that nigga will ever be
cuz I won't beef with someone thats bigger than me
people plannin murder schemes, make others bleed
undetected by regime, pull hits silently
quietly, silencer, on two twin glocks
deuce shots, watch people drop, from twin tops
the cops...are clueless, their cars...moveless
Dun wanna fuck wit the ruthless, knowin they'll lose it
they choose not to deal with the poverty of lives
thoughts we thinkin can't be processed in der minds
thinkin bout suicide, Ak carryin misfits
Apache-wielding maniacs, Gauge-used hits
makin people flip, inside out, shredded to bits
sisters hair ain't the only place where u'll find clips

*still goin*

Sum nice lines in here. nice drop man.

one of my fav is
"Enlisted, but wearin no suit, though imma recruit
cuz uniform consists of a hoodie n boots"

could of been worded a lil better.. but the image is great.

I thought this was a really good piece man, I'd like to hear audio see what it sounds like. The only thing I would suggest is breaking up the lines more so it would be easier to read. usually written tracks are 16 but it varies, keep at it man1

The was nice dogg, keep postin stuff like that

it was ok, a bit full of yourself, were you actually saying that you are better than tupac, if you were dont be silly

uppin