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I'm the king...better address me as your highness/
your style is like +butter+ without the +fly+ness.
I'm a good guy I just have a bad cause/
running around with no respect for no laws.
Can't judge me not even when I'm 6 feet deeper/
fuck you Saint Peter, can't judge me neither.
God handed 10 commandements but I canned them/
live a life of sin so now I'm stranded.
On this earth till alcohol burns away my organs/
stored in the morque by a hospital warden.
16 years of human presence has left me in repentance/
God gave me life...9 years till I end my sentence.
T O double M Y/
the 45 swallow my blood before I swallow my pride.
Ready to die but do the time God set/
knowledge isn't what you learn but what you can't forget.

OK stuff...for a new guy to RB....Sum lines were startlingly gud...N sum were amateurish...but all in all...a gud piece..can see U gettin gud mate...This is Ur fiorst post?

i agree with kwizikal some lines were really good some were not so good
i liked this line "I'm a good guy I just have a bad cause/
running around with no respect for no laws."

Thanks for the crit
Yeh this was my first post
Anyone else wana offer some constructive criticism???

..Not bad for your first post..decent flow...keep at it..click my sig~~

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