Excerpt from Gone...
 

I never had an allegence to anything...
that was more than myself... and thus,
if in God we trust... why are all men in power masons..?
only takes one to accept a concept,
if pro is the opposite of con... then progress is that of congress...
n E'll push things... n move king's completely,
like what police riot squads did to em back in the sixty's...
Jeep got the idea, they'll sell liberty too,
cars n trucks mixed with stars n lust.... how much is freedom for you...
while the 40 and a mule aint enough to overcome,
and the interest if interested is worth 7 planets n' sons...
in the beginning... the shot was blast,
how will niccas on blocks last when they start is sychronous to the ending...
now every call is being recorded for your protection too,
while every split second taped... then protected from you...
and they tell kids which soda to drink' n' slogan to speak,
while school literature doesn't show em to think... n you know it dude...


Hopefully you get it... if you don't... to bad... if you do... great... if it sucks... tell me... I'll holla..!




oh if you're wonderin why it says... "n E'll..." it's part of my emcee alias...

heres the breakdown: dont type out audio...record it!
the topic and approach was good, but at times seemed disjointed
some more sprinkle of vocab here and there would do wonders

overall, i say good job E'll

..this was Dope..I personally like these two lines...your content was great..haven't read many open mics from you(maybe cause you don't drop many..LOL)but..I'll be looking forward to it..Dope... :thumbup:

yea I fell you... it's the extremely rough copy... and the emcee name is Mr. E... ;)


good lookin on the feedback...

what can we say bout E, . dope

Jeep got the idea, they'll sell liberty too,
cars n trucks mixed with stars n lust.... how much is freedom for you...
^ ^ favorite line that shit was nice,

overall a very good piece..props,. ohh and that pro con line ..damn man..
shit wasnt nice it was beyond that..

good shit...

Good piece...at points, the bars were fucked up, very odd, but then again as The Realest mentioned, it would be better on Audio...Nice wordplay and metaphors in this piece...need to elevate with the vocabulary in my opinion...nice work man...
Check out mine, return the favour..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109651

Has been noted... but the only thing I can't respect is the "need to elevate with the vocabulary"... cause honestly... I have a wide vocab range... but why use it if it isn't needed..? Nothing about you... it's just... shit about vocab is one of my pet peeves...



it doesn't really matter... what matters is how you put it together... I could literally say 'hifalutin' in a joint but why..? I could just say egotistical... n' people would not only understand it better... but identify with it quicker and that way they could get down to the true meaning of what I was saying... All in all... vocabulary can help... but sometimes henders... know how to use it... and get it done...

uppin for Evolve to be "brutally honest" with...



WHOA..!

Verbal so fuckin VERBAL..!



FUCK YOU IN THE ASS WITH A SLING SHOT..!

Ok... could have brought the picture out more, but overall this was what reading posts is all about. This is what posting is all about. This is what using your voice is all about. This is what this site is all about. If I had to grade this - 83!! Keep posting and hit the booth - with a UPC for reaction.