Amp Vz Lilt
 

alright rules:

10-16 lines
no crew, well you don't need to worry about that
um,you spit first, and I won't feed so I'll be waiting

alright lets go :thumbup:

as soon as i spit these flows u get scared n run no need for u to go cuz i already won u think u can do the type of shit i do come on b fa real whoops my bad ya fake so dont come at me wit date soft shit like a shake . while u makin club house hits i'm makin the big ones the 1's that wen they hit u , u feel like u've been shot by a gun . this aint no comp not even close this aint even my best have u runnin round wit no clothes . i told u i was sick wit it b4 we even started i put that look on ur face like someone just farted this right here it's kind of funny it brings me a laugh n wen the future comes i'm go'n think of the past so let go cuz right now i'm really tired of dis so i'm out n i kno they this is gettin u pisses

A'ight man, to clear this all out, I told you last night to separate ya lines//
That's a newbie crime, just hope you can learn and do it right next time//
This battle has nothin' to do with our newly forged friend ship, but dang//
I want you to get out of the habit and start doin' things like it ain't no thang//
Really this is your first battle I can understand you bein' new to this site//
The reality is if you can't beat me you need to elevate to a new height//
This is a tutorial and I wish to inform you that I'll take you along and develop you//
Just don't get used to the kindness from everyone else will take it easy too//
Conducting you to the righ direction is all that this battleis meant to do//
You will soon see that battlin' ain't boastin' so this is an informance clue//
Kid take it slow and learn your way around before you come and try this//
In the dark you jumped in,look it's your first post, c'mon lets just finish//
Tutorial is over from now on it's serious and I suggest you develop real fast//
This kid's story's just begginin' and I wish him a happy ending, or try at last//

Yeah well we still friends, even though we just met yesterday, no hard feelings, good battle, but structure your verse so it's easy to read

Later

wow, lilt i can barely read what your trying to say here, it really doesnt make sense, you need to get a new structure, something readable, also it would help if it rhymed or had a single personal or multi, and your punches werent weak as hell.

amp. good battle, good punches and everything, but you took it kinda weak on him, seemed to have a more friendly air to it then like you really wanted to beat him, but still your battle by far

vote: amp

lilt's didnt make sence.....and amp had much better ounches/personals etc etc....
easy choice here....lilt just elevate....and battle some noobies....fix ya structure amp lines to stretched too......
holla
v-amp

uppin, i guess my structure is now considered "old fashioned" and takes away from my verse,now that's the whackest stuff I've ever heard, how's "//" and the way i put it take away from my verse, someone please explain this, hell I like the "old fashioned" way, if i gotta lose battles thanks to it,so be it, I'm not givin' up the way i do things for a win, as wierd as it may sound...

AMP u get my vote and u won plain and simple haha.......AMP had better flow and harder hitting punches...nice work..return the favor and vote on my battle thanx..........~*1*~
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109269

Uppin' (2) if every post after the verse is considered an up

Uppin'

Uppin(4)

and close this please

Shit Amp took this wit ease, Lilt had mad newb structure which fucked flow, and myb patience. Amp came with some nice originality, and had a couple good punches and metas. Not a bad battle from him, Lilt, straighten ya structure out, and check out other battles to get the right iodea
Please check this out guys. Take the time, I did. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109267

[QUOTE=lyric]Shit Amp got this, Lilt had bad structure and amp had better flow, puches ect... lilt you gotta make more sence cuase i didint have a clue what you where trying to get across

vote - Amp

return the favour
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Uppin (final) someone just come and close this so i can go call out virtuoso and merk him like he's never seen one before

Um Just Tell A Mod To Close The Fourm If U Really Want It Closed

wow, lilt change up ya struct....its to hard to read.. ya punches were aiight but nothin special. try to add metas in them to make them more complex, personals do that too.

amp. ya had a overall decent verse wit some good punches, but your struct was also bad with streatched lines...cut them down a bit and you dont need // on the end

but overall - amp took this cuz of his punches